Haiku (English Assignment)

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*I have to write two haiku for my writing class. I've written all these, and I want you to tell me which two you think I should turn in, if any of them (I'm numbering them so you can just tell me which numbers). Also feel free to help me. I'm new at writing haiku and definitely not the best at it :). Thanks! :D


1. I save the raindrops
before they can collapse down
the foggy window.

2. The scent of coffee
wakes my senses, but I choose
to stay in Dream Land.

3. In his gentle arms
I lay, warmth surging through me.
I feel safe and loved.

4. “No, Mozart, come here!”
His prey between his sharp teeth,
He runs as I chase.

5. Always in my world,
listening to my music.
Oh, the bell just rang.

6. Dancing in my mind,
memories remind me of
the year you loved me.

7. Sometimes the sky cries,
occasionally screaming.
Why is he so down?

8. I will follow you
to the place you call home now,
when it is my time.

9. Swimming in the lake,
blond hair swirling around her,
she noticed a fish.


*Edit: I submitted number one, two, and four for my writing class!
Last edited by leeanna13097 on Mon Mar 15, 2010 5:40 am, edited 2 times in total.
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NUMBER 4

I want number 4!

I don't know about the second one but number definietly! Though for a second haiku I would have to with 7!

4!!!! and 7!
I spy!




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Number two and number six! Definately! You must choose those, they are simply beautiful! Well, I suppose I like number four also. Two, six, and four! Wait, only two? Well, um..Two and four! No, two and six! Six and four? I don't know! One of those three though.

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I think they are all pretty brilliant. My favorite is 2,7 and 9. I can't pick out of them. My only advice to you is to randomly pick a number and go with that one . You can't fail. I envy you! I wish I could write Haiku's. Keep up the good work!
-Matt




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Thank you all so much for the replies!! I never dreamed people would actually praise my haiku :D. You should have seen me when I saw the things you all said. I was bouncing around like a little five year old, lol.

Thanks again! :D
~~Lee-Anna
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