I Was His Slave

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He bound and gagged me
Tied me to the chair
Then he walked away
Leaving me in hunger and pain

He ruled me.
I could only eat when he let me,
Drink when he offered water,
Walk when he took me out of the chair
Bound to his wrist when we went out

I could not speak to anyone
Without his permission
If i so much as smiled
and waved to my best friend
It was a federal crime

If he wanted something from me
I had to give it to him
No matter what the price

One day, he handed me a knife
and said "Here, do what you will with it."
I aimed for his heart, and hit it dead-on

No blood gushed out
He didn't fall
He simply smiled his wicked smile and said

"I am immortal,I am all-encompassing.
You cannot wholly escape me
For i can't let you out of my sight
No matter how hard i may try."

I thought a bit, then realized
That sadly,his words were true
So rather than try to kill him again
I cut the ropes binding us
And then I ran.

Halfway 'round the world i ran
On the joy of never seeing him again!
Through city, farm, mountain, even ocean
I neither noticed nor cared where I ran

Every so often, he calls or sends an e-mail
Just to keep in check, he says
And I always answer,whether i want to or not
For as he said,i can't escape

And guess what?
He calls you too.
Maybe you were enslaved once
Or maybe you are and you just can't see

He has infinite names
In every tongue
For if you don't have to be bound to his will
You must be God
Or maybe Satan

Maybe you know him as Fear
Maybe Doubts or Pessimism
To you, he could simply be Shyness
Or perhaps you know him better as Hate

No matter how you see him
Find the knife, and take it
For you shouldn't be that close.




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This is really good! Dark, with a good message in it.

No matter how you see him
Find the knife, and take it
For you shouldn't be that close.


I love this last stanza; it really clicks with the rest of the poem.
"A poet in love is best encouraged in both capacities or neither." ~ Jane Austen, Emma.




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i agree. the overall feel is dark, and somewhat mysterious until the end. the first stanza really grabbed me. i wanted to know who or what was enslaving you. very accurate with human emotionsm as well. the feeling of depsiar, adn a humans instinct to hurt what is hurting them, even if there is a better alterniative (such as cutting the ropes)




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Excellent!!! Brings tears to my eyes.

I was trying to think of who/what this person might be, and I loved how you left that until the end, giving many possibilities.

Wow. What a poem. Beautifully dark.




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I loved this poem. Especially that it had an underlying message with it. I love it!
Samantha Wallace
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Ooh...very dark and creepy...but good....very good.
Got YWS?

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- Dale Carnegie




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Wow. Niteowl, I thought that this was one of your best. An excellent message, perfect flow and great description. Keep writing!




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Yeah, it really was awesome. Very well put.




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I loved it.

I hate posting on someone's work and not being able to give SOMETHING that I thought could have been improved, but I just loved this so much. It's well worded, flows beautifully, and the message is absolutely terrific. How many more compliments can I give this? It was fabulous!
The robbed that smiles, steals something from the thief. ~William Shakespeare, Othello
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I agree with everyone else. It was beatifully written and mysterious and dark and just over all...brilliant. I lved the first stanza too. It makes you want to read on. That's good in a poem. :D :D :D
Way hay!!!!




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Oh wow its moving... :D Nice job.




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loved this, it had a great message and the first couple lines really got my attention! good job.
sarah b.



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