Pusher Man

I see you
Tossing and turning
Although you're not tired
Eyes watering
Mouth aching
Nose running
Cramps in your stomach
It's 4:30AM
And all you want to know
Is where the goddamn pusher's at?

Firstly, welcome to YWS!!

OK
Although I don't get this poem,it flows pretty OK.
Just one thing.
Punctuation!
Remember a line break is not a pause, but a comma is.
Think of someone reading it out loud, or try it yourself!

Keep writing!
Pgsgirl x

Eyes watering, mouth aching, those are signs of a junkie trying to quit heroin. In the end "Where's the goddamn pusher at?" the junkie decides the psychical symptoms are too great and he's going to return to heroin.

Hey there.

You've got some good description in this, and you've created quite a strong image by holding nothing back.

The whole thing is a little short, and even though short and sweet can be a good thing, this poem just doesn't seem to be able to reach its full potential in that format.