letting you go

I feel the presence of you
the joy, the laughter, those things that you once new
I feel the presure of you
the worry that I went through
You sit there with expectations so great
If I don't act soon I fear I'll be too late
You might get up and leave
there might be another "vision" to see
An easier me.
Some girl to give up all that she has
or, by the time you get to her, all that she had
But while I want to make you stay
part of me feels a different way
Life would be so much better if you went
I could relive past years again
Years I so unwisly spent
I could be free and so could you
Maybe if I let you go
it would be the best thing anyone could possibly do

T'was pretty good. Didn't blow me away, but I liked "Some girl to give up all that she has/or, by the time you get to her, all that she had". Keep writing.

Ok cool. there are some really good features in this poem. good work. i really love the way your rhyming isnt forced.
i think you could improve on some aspects of this so i hope i can be of some help.
Firstly, punctuation is always really necessary and shouldn't be only occasionally used.
I think that u need a few more commas because otherwise, bits run into others and it got slightly hard to follow near the middle. It might be an idea to add a few in.
Also, in the second line, i think you mean 'knew' instead of 'new'
just a thought
anyway, good work! this has real potential. well done!
hope i have been of some help!