Young Writers Society

A tiny "M" is tattooed on each one,
If you open a bag I'll guarantee fun.
So many bright colors I think I'll go blind,
To eat red or blue first, I can't make up my mind!

Of M&M's I'm a very big fan,
"They melt in your mouth, not in your hand!"
So I'll pop a few in with my mouth open wide,
Just waiting to taste the flavor inside.

I love so much the chocolate sensation,
These candies deserve a standing ovation!
I savor each one so it won't go to waste,
They each have an individual taste.

I suddenly peer down into my hand,
That once contained colors; now it is bland.
No more chocolate, this moment I dread,
I'll get some more soon, but for now I've been fed.

I liked it!

I love so much the chocolate sensation,
These candies deserve a standing ovation!

I loved this part!

No more chocolate, this moment i dread

You need to capitalize the 'i'. That's the only thing I caught!
Great job!
-Sometimes-

Thanks, Sometimes, I didn't notice that before.

Aww! I think it's adorable! I love M&M's as well. Your rhyming is done very well except for perhaps "fan" and "hand," but sometimes that can't be helped so I'm not complaining. Great peom, you made me smile! I have nothing else to comment on! ^^ Keep writing!

~Yoyo

Very interesting.

It's really fresh your style and definitely your theme.

I bet the ad agency will heavily pay you for this.

You should consider illustrating this poem.

The rhyming was neat too.

er... the I you captilazied seems to be in bold, nothing much but thought I'd point that out.

I liked it.

I love M&M's! Wee! I went to the salon yesterday and got my nails painted like M&M's. Red, blue, orange, green and yellow. Diff colors on my feet. lol.

Your poem was very interesting. I like the rhyming. It went very well with the poem.

I think you should chop this off into stanzas, it would be better.

Great job, great poem.

Peace man,
Casey the AWESOME

I like it. It is a silly poem that actually rings completely true. We all love M&M's. I like the rhyming. It almost never seems forced. Except for rhyming wide and inside. That's a tad weak. Everything else is great.

Cute! I really liked it.

Great job! A cute well-done rhyming poem about M&M's. Very refreshing.

Just one thing. You spelled "guarantee" wrong in the second line.

Keep writing!

I liked this poem! Adorable, just adorable! Nicely done! Great!

I loved it! Well done! You nicely captured the fun and sugary sweetness of M&Ms! Just lovely. Keep it up!

Awww, I loved it! I could see a handful of M&Ms as I read this poem! The rhyming added and kept a wonderful flow to this poem--it was nice and cutesy! Keep writing!

I love how you have written this.
Especially with the fact that you've used rhyme.
Very good.