crow

She's a theiving little crow ,she is
And yet she will not grow.
She hides in the shadow of the sun
And in the shade of night.
She loves to fly from house to house
And steal in without a mouse to rouse.
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She wears a blackened mask to hide her face
To leave you without her trace.
She likes to dance in the night
When others are full of fright.
And she likes to run in the rain
To leave you all with water stain.
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This crow, this crow
Does not steal silver or gold
But the things most dear to you.
The ones sleeping across your hall
It's said she takes them to hell
To join in the fire
In which we retire

First off, you should do at least two reviews for every piece you post.

Second off, this doesn't look like you put any effort at all into it. There's no capitalization, insufficient punctuation, misspellings, and a poorly executed rhyme scheme. If you're going to post a poem or story, show us that you take it seriously.

Next time, if you put a little effort into it, I'll be willing to put a bit more effort into critiquing it. Keep writing!

Ello I am SimonCowellLuver. I didn't really like it that much. There is no emotion into it. In poetry you should have some kind of emotion not just plain old boring type.
I can help you with the emotion part but you didn't even try. This seems like it was tmade out of the blue. Sorry to be harsh but if i can't speak about what is wrong you can't fix it. There is no punctionuation at all so it is one long "run-on" sentence.

Also there isn't any Capitalization in this. To me you should work harder on this not just rush through it like it seem you have done. If you have any questions feel free to PM me anytime.

SimonCowellLuver

Unlike the above review, I am no lover of Simon Cowell. But I think I'm becoming him (doing all these reviews in one day).

There was no emotion in this piece! And the spellin and punctuation mistakes are...distracting.

I don't know if you didn't care when you wrote this, but if so, please refrain from posting it! Thankyou and I'd like to see another poem (with emotion) from you someday!

I am sorry, but this did not seem like a poem at all. There was no meaning, nothing rhymes, and I love poems that rhyme. hehe. But If you work with this, you might be able to make it better. Right now, it is just a bunch of words, but good luck, it will be interesting to see what you could do with this. Goodluck.

I can't quite understand it. I don't know if I consider this a poem at all. I didn't like it. It seemed a little too boring for me.

The second stanza rhyming is bad. Really. It's like you just put it there so it would rhyme. Please don't do that. It is not pleasing.

There's very little emotion in your poem. Try putting figurative language into it.

I like your idea and theme for your poem, but I think you need to work harder in the interpretation of it. Keep practicing and it'll do you a good one in the end!

Good Luck!

~Casey

Ok i got bored and desidedto change the whole thing so there.

I'm not a regular poetry reader, but here's my opinion: it doesn't seem to flow. It seems kinda...chunky, I guess? Sorry if it's supposed to be that way, or some poems are just written like that. Like I said, I don't read or write poems very often.

It has already been said that...

a) this wasn't even a poem

and that

b) you put no effort in this at all

And I must agree. It doesn't make any sense whatsoever. This seemed to be written on a fluke and not even read over or revised in any way, shape, or form. I don't want to sound cruel and I definately don't want to nitpick at every single thing wrong with this 'poem', so I'll leave it at that.

However, I suggest you keep writing and try writing poetry again--the only thing this 'poem' had was a flow!

Um...ok the thing about it not even being a poem was to another peom that i rote over but ok I'll try not to cry....

The peoms for the crow was to signafy basicly the reaper but ya lots of people don't ever seem to get my drift....O well...


-em