Masked

No one knows
the real me
The fake one
is what you see
I never was
what you think I am,
and even with this mask,
I never will be.

never be...what?

Overall, it was rather cliched and simplistic

Yes, yes... 'no one understands me! *slits wrist to the sounds of Simple Plan* WAHHH- Is all good and well if you're pursuing a career in....
Well, anyway, the point I was getting to is that it's OK to write a poem about being masked, but please do try to do something different with it, won't you?

I'm with what Eds(Whence) Said. I think that if you are going to pick such a chiched topic, at least try to make it your own. You can put more effert in this, hoenstly, how long did it take you to write this?

I echo everyone else. It was good, but it was too short. You might of wanted to add more detail.

-- M.B.Author

M.B.Author wrote:I echo everyone else. It was good, but it was too short. You might of wanted to add more detail.

-- M.B.Author

How can you be echoing me if you say something else entirely?

But on topic:

Don't be discouraged from writing because of this. Read a lot of poetry.

I think back to my earlier poems and...-shudders-

But I've read a lot since then, and I like to think I've improved some.