I found this in my photobucket... and I have no idea... where it's from, but surely I must have written it... if I didn't then I have no idea where it's from... Enjoy.
I liked it and the emotion in it, but I had a few focus issues with it. Stanza 6 and 7 seemed very random and didn't really fit the whole feel of the poem, especially the line about the beer. Maybe you could take those and instead do a rather ambiguous description of the deceased, maybe decribing his carress or something. I really liked the whole feeling throught it though, despite those things. Very good, especially the artwork!
It is often said that before you die your life passes before your eyes. It is in fact true. It's called living. (Terry Pratchett)
Passing by, passing trials;
passing life as in denial
U can feel the strong emotions of the tree in the poem.Well done!
And is that tree hand drawn?Its always nice to see pictures related to that poem,it brings out an effect out of the poem.
"A good plot is like a dream.If you dont write down your dream on paper the moment you wake up,the chances are you'll forget it and it'll be gone forever"-Roald Dalh.
The second line is useless. Um. I would love you if this was typed. I really think it needs some revision I could help with, but oetherwise it has some dry and dragging parts that need to be chopped down so you can get to the better core of the poem.
