The Dragon.

I'm going to disregard grammar and spelling flaws, as it seems you have help with that already!

Overall, I think this comes across as being a little cliched. Because we don't have a thorough sense of the two characters, and the story centers on an event that is not uncommon, it doesn't have anything striking to distinguish it from other similar works. This doesn't mean that it's a bad story, of course, only that it could use a little tweaking, I think.

First, I think you could use a little more interaction--a little more character development--in the beginning. Your personalities and banter are both very charming, and if you expand on that it will make your tale more interesting. Also, I think you should work a little more on expanding your paragraphs. Right now it's very choppy feeling, because you indent after each line. It makes it seem rushed, and you can't really stop and grasp what is going on while you are reading it.

You could use a little more description as well, with more expansive terms and a more consistant tone throughout this piece.

Otherwise, I think it's a great, funny, cute little story! Well done!

Thank you to the people who commented. I'm gonna work on descriptions in a while.

Amazing. I didn't expect that the flow will be like that. Maybe its my first time to read a story where a dragon is not dependent to his master and the weird thing is, the dragon talks and the girl wasn't shock why the dragon talks that way. You should put that emotion there. Human, in nature, will be amaze or shock if an animal or anything can understand him and even talks to him.

General over view, polish more. Put adverbs and adjectives! That will complete your story

My 8 year old says this.

I liked the dragon in the story. Marie's and the dragon's description was fabulous. When you used the word 'barred' do you really mean the word 'bared'? The fun thing about the dragon is that he looks scary but he's not. I think he's my favourite character actually!

Dragons get all the bad rap these days, just the other day one of my pet dragons, (his name is arnold) said someone started shooting at him! How Rude!

In general, it was quite a charming story.
I liked that Marie usally won bets, but she didn't win this one and also that the dragon was quite calm, but really huge.
I didn't like the dialogue. It was too wishy washy for me. I suggest using words other than said or if you just use said, use words like annoyingly to expand the readers vision of the setting and also to imagine how the person is saying it, so that it gives a clear picture

loved it! i wish my brother had told me to do that and i had actually found one!! by the way, love your name, ladypurple. i love the color purple. keep writing.

Aww, the sweet moment of rubbing it in one's face. I enjoyed this short story it was really cute. I like how you described a lot of detail so I could actually picture the dragon in my head. I wish I had a dragon. I can't wait to see more of your writing. This is my second review and I think I'm doing good. ^^ I'll get better as I do more. Well that's it from me. Keep writing!

~Freeze~

I like the story line so far, you are very creative. It's sort of hard to get a real grasp of what's going on, because it is short. Write on!

Interesting indeed. You should add onto this and make more than just this one. Since Vray was talking about his human eating cousin, you should make it into a story about having to find him and kill him.

Hey - I love it!
This is a very cute short story (: I do, however, think it might have done better as a poem.
You do need to watch your capitalisation.
And also: ' ... he folded them back and put his huge hind legs back. He tilted his head back and closed those big red eyes ...' The repitition of the word 'back' in that sentence is very noticeable. You might want to change the phrasing so the repeating of the word is not necessary. Also, when you describe the dragon, you do it extremely well - especially the bit about him breathing fire - but you might want to describe the head more. 'Big' is a bit blunt. (A bit of alliteration there.)
Overall, I thought this was a very good short story and I really loved it
Keep writing, and God bless,
Ignis

I liked it so much! I liked how you left the story off like that so the readers can think of how the story should end.