Land of Drake.

This will be the main thread for my novel...

So far, I have written all this in my Microsoft word file; (Note: No chapters yet, just a little bit of info.) I'll edit it a lot, so stay tuned. BTW, if you know any skilled illustrators, please contact me. I really want to have a world map made, and maybe see what my dragons look like on paper =P

Average Man- Women: 5’ 6” Men: 6’ 1” (Elves fit into this category. However, they are slightly skinnier)
Dwarves- Women: 3’ 9” Men: 4’ 5”
Northerners- Women 5’ 2’ Men- 5’ 7’
Gnomes- Women ‘2 8” Men 3’ 5”

Dragons-
Combat Size: 30-100 Ft. 600 pounds to 4000 pounds.
Average Worker Size: 6- 9 Ft. 200-400 pounds.
Courier Size- 10-25 Ft. 100 to 200 pounds.
Personal Assistant- Varies.

Species.

Combat Dragons-

Gatlinger: 1000 pounds and 65 Ft., Fast and Powerful. Green eyes, dark turquoise talons and wings, aqua colored scales. Smooth and sleek body, long tail. Able to swim underwater for half an hour. Usually employed by Navy to combat pirates and serpents.
Flight time of 16.


Ragnar: 3000-4000 Pounds and 95-100. Massive and slow, with huge red-orange scales and wings. Tail is around 10 feet long and stubby. Eyes are a fierce piercing golden color and talons are pure black. Quite rare, and beloved by infantrymen. Can spit fire and cause minor quakes by landing like a thrown stone. Flight time of 15 hours.

Commonius:

· 600 Pounds and 30 ft. Long
· Shabby Yellow color
· Somewhat shinier wings
· Grey talons.
· Blue eyes
· 5-foot long sleek tail.
· Thin and sleek body. Very maneuverable.
· Have no special abilities.
· Are used for general dragon defense; best for aerial combat.
· Flight time of 22 hours
· Have many variations, depending on where the egg was hatched. There have been a recorded amount of around 8 different variations.


Fafnier:

· 1500 Pounds and 55 Ft.
· Brick red scales.
· Black Leathery wings.
· Black horns poke out over the eye socket.
· Black Spine Ridge.
· Often called the Devil’s choice.
· Most captains that receive a Fafnier egg are rumored to be cursed, but most people do not believe it and are glad that they have one on their side.
· Spreads red acid that burns anything it touches; referred to as Devil’s Spit.
· Are medium paced, but only have a flight time of 18 hours.
· Eggs can only be raised in –Fire Region-


Glaciasmite:

· 1300 pounds and 50 ft.
· Ice colored underbelly, lumpy snow color scales.
· Storm cloud colored wings and talons.
· Medium sized. Not sleek nor fat.
· Chilling breath that freezes many things.
· Eggs can only be raised in –Ice region-
· Light blue eyes.
· Generally have a hatred for Fafniers.
· Flight time of 26 hours.

Quetzalquat:

· 1800 pounds and 70 FT. long.
· Purple, red, yellow, and turquoise feathers.
· Eagle likes talons.
· Orange beak.
· Bird wings.
· Eggs only raised near equator.
· Very vein.
· Flight time of 35 hours.
· Only given to those of high stature.
· Have the ability the ability to “freeze” opponents for a few minutes by intently staring at them. However, it only works on dragons, and chances are it won’t have a good chance to stare at it.
· Prefer male owners.

Helionus:

· 80 ft. and 1200 pounds
· Pure Angelic white scales, wings, and talons.
· Golden eyes and spine ridge.
· Flight time of 40 hours.
· Nicknamed “Flying Angle”, for it is the best dragon when it comes to flying.
· Very light.
· Smart
· Rarer than a Quetzalquat, but same amount of power.
· Prefer female aviators.
· Ability to hover in the air.
· Usually reserved for royalty.
· Will probably be used as the main dragon.

Rarius:

· 40 ft. long and 800 pounds.
· Jade green scales and wings.
· Brown spine ridge.
· Shiny talons.
· An off-shoot species of the Commonius.
· Faster, more powerful, and sleeker than a Commonius.
· Reserved for experienced captains.
· The species came from a tampered Commonius egg.

These dragons aren’t all of them however. There are many variations of them, and breeders always mix them together. But those 8 are the basis for all other dragon breeds.

Average Worker Dragon.

These dragons are the ones that help with farming, building, and basically all other types of manual labor. Unlike combat dragons, interbreeding is quite harmful, so the listed species are the only ones.

Arvensi:

· 6’ 5” in length, 250 pounds.
· Greenish-yellow scales.
· Small, green, unusable wings.
· No Spine ridge.
· Blue eyes
· Blunt teeth.
· The species is used mainly for farming. The reason its appearance is abnormal is because they used as slaves in the past. Through the massive tortures the dragons went through, each generation passed on a little trait caused by this. It wasn’t long before they looked like they do when they were born.
· Their blunt teeth allow them to only be able to eat cereals/grass/ prepared meat.


Petrork:

· 7’ and 325 pounds.
· Grey scales, spine ridge, eyes, and wings.
· Strong
· Blunt talons.
· Able to spit eroding acid.
· Used in quarries and mines. Its blunt talons and powerful acid allows it to help the miners reach deeper depths for better elements.
· One of the only species that live in Dwarven country.
· Also one of the only worker dragons that may be called in for military duty in dire times.
· Great night vision
· Can detect poisonous gases underground.
· Also helps sculpt and build statues/buildings.


Haliomon:

· 6’ in length and 200 pounds.
· Blue scales, aqua wings, and turquoise spine ridges.
· Nimble fingers.
· Sharp, serrated teeth
· Small but highly usable wings.
· General crews of 3 are on every medium sized ship and up.
· Their nimble fingers and small wings help them maneuver around the ship and help the crew.
· Usual work for them is standing on look out, fixing small kinks in the sails, and other minor things.
· They also help when fighting enemies. Their serrated teeth strike fear into many an enemy.
· However, they hate to fight. Like most worker class dragons, they cannot stand the happenings of war.


Silverius:

· 8 Ft. in length and 360 Pounds.
· Brown Scales
· Silver wings and spine ridge.
· Talons are sharp and big
· Used for wood related purposes.
· Most of the time, they claw giant trees out of the ground and allow the woodsman do the rest, but when constructing big structures with wood, such as ships and buildings, they are used to help the workers set the big logs/planks.
· Silverius are worker class dragon that can also fight in times of need.

Physiake:

· 9’ and 400 Pounds
· Color changes like a Chameleon.
· Has a huge medical pack on it.
· Goes with dragon formations in war and supplies them with aid.
· When not in war, they are used to ferry supplies to new colonies, help adventurers, and deliver sick people to hospitals.


Courier dragons are swift and sleek dragons. They are used for transporting mail and public transportation. There are only two species; however, they both come in many colors.

Ensina:

· 18’ and 145 pounds.
· They all have different color schemes.
· Carry post
· Their harnesses have straps to strap on large satchels filled with mail.
· Each satchel has mail belonging to a village.
· In times of a breeding boom, as the breeders like to call it, Ensinas are used as scouts for the military. Their speed and fly time is comparable to only Helionus.
· They have a one-man crew.


Transake:

· 25’ and 200 pounds
· They all have different color schemes.
· Carry people
· Harness has a small human harness on each of the dorsal scales on the spinal ridge.
· Though they can go quit fast, they are forced to go slowly, due to safety regulations.
· Luggage can be carried in huge bags hanging from the harness.
· Are manned by one captain, and one flag waver.

Personal Assistant dragons:

These dragons are special. In theory, they are just one single species. However, , depending on where the dragon was born, it will have its own special ness. Ones whose egg was held in Blacksmith will have abilities that will help with the trade. Most of the time, the PA dragons are the size of a full-grown man when at full size. They are prized among artisans; whole art collections have been started by the awe they get from their dragon.

What exactly do you want us to review?this is just facts, so there's few writing errors we could comment on, no parts of the plot that don't make sense.

I was hoping for comments on what I have so far...

Ooooooh, I'll comment. Okay, one, the Northerners are pretty awesome. I love penguins and reindeer.

Seccond:
So this is basically the outline of the beings who live in your world, right?
It's good to start with outlines. It helps you get organized, so when you actually go to write, it will be a lot easier to actually get it out. So, what you're doing right now is good.

Third:
You have a good selection of dragons here. The descriptions are very very good.

Finally:
I hope you don't intend to cram all of this info. into the first couple chapters of your story. You probably weren't going to, but remember, you should subtly let us know about these beings instead of just giving us a huge info dump.

Anyways, I can't wait to read the story.

~N~

~nariel~ wrote:Ooooooh, I'll comment. Okay, one, the Northerners are pretty awesome. I love penguins and reindeer.

Seccond:
So this is basically the outline of the beings who live in your world, right?
It's good to start with outlines. It helps you get organized, so when you actually go to write, it will be a lot easier to actually get it out. So, what you're doing right now is good.

Third:
You have a good selection of dragons here. The descriptions are very very good.

Finally:
I hope you don't intend to cram all of this info. into the first couple chapters of your story. You probably weren't going to, but remember, you should subtly let us know about these beings instead of just giving us a huge info dump.

Anyways, I can't wait to read the story.

~N~

Thanks Nariel. As you predicted, I wasn't going to dump it all into the first chapters. However, I was planning on having an appendix at the back for people who want the info faster, or in more detail.

Currently, I am thinking of a way I could have a crew on a combat dragon. Any ideas? The dragon itself would have a harness itself, on which to hook armor on...

Hey Temeraire- it just so happens, I have my own dragons in my stories, too! And yours are good, by the way. I'd offer to draw them, but I don't know if I could get the pictures done/scanned in to the computer any time soon... And they're VERY complicated... >_>

For my dragons, I have one person/dragon that are bonded like Anne McCaffery's and Paolini's are. So they only fit one person on the saddle/harness. It sounds to me like you want a couple of men/dragon, though... >_> That's going to be an interesting undertaking.

Gladius wrote:Hey Temeraire- it just so happens, I have my own dragons in my stories, too! And yours are good, by the way. I'd offer to draw them, but I don't know if I could get the pictures done/scanned in to the computer any time soon... And they're VERY complicated... >_>

For my dragons, I have one person/dragon that are bonded like Anne McCaffery's and Paolini's are. So they only fit one person on the saddle/harness. It sounds to me like you want a couple of men/dragon, though... >_> That's going to be an interesting undertaking.

Nice to meet a fellow dragon enthusiast =P

And yeah, after reading the Temeraire books, I really want to have a manned dragon for wars.

Maybe straps with hooks for carabiners? I could imagine a hardness with a bunch of rings on it... yes, that is how I'll do it.

Any who, I'll update the first post soon. I'm trying to finish all the dragon species, and then I'll start work on the ships of the various nations, then infantry, then artillery, then cavalry, and at the same time maybe even create a map for the world and start the story itself.

Yay! a fellow dragon enthusiast!!! *hi five* There seem to be a lot on here, actually... *shrug*

ANYWAY- *to the harness* I like the sound of that. But that's going to be awfully inconvienient on quick drops for the soliders to become infanty... if you plan on that... >_> And would your people in this novel even have caribeaners (sp?)?

How many types (of dragons) do you have, exactly? :X And what's the country called? or are you going to tell us in the next post?

Gladius wrote:*to the harness* yay! I like the sound of that. But that's going to be awfully inconvienient for quick drops for the soliders to become infanty... >_> And would your people in this novel have caribeaners (sp?)?

How many types (of dragons) do you have, exactly? :X And what's the country called? or are you going to tell us in the next post?

Well, the soldiers would be the dragon's crew. The world will have technology from the Napoleonic era, so there would be riflemen, flag men so they could talk with other dragons in war, and so on.

And yes, they will have carabiners.

About the dragons; I listed 8 combat dragon species. However, combat dragons are the only ones that aren't picky enough when it comes to breeding, so crossbreeds are quite common.

Then I'll probably have some more Working class dragons, a small group of courier type dragons, and some specialty type dragons.

So, to sum it up, a lot =P

Wow, you really summed up your dragons pretty good. Nice to see someone so enthusiastic about them, too. I really don't have much to say, except for good job and can't wait to read your actual story!

-Mays

Thanks May!

Since you can see I am very serious when it comes to descriptions, you can probably imagine why I hate doing Book Reports that can only be a couple paragraphs long =P

Updated the first post. Will begin on ships now.

I'm finishing up the world map, so stay tuned for new info.

First of all, great idea in getting all of your information down first. I like the different species that you used and how you described each one. My favorite were the Haliomon. Really descriptive, they sound beautiful. The only thing that I noticed was your weight range for dragons. 600-4000 pounds isn't that much when you think about it. Is it because they work? Besides that everything else was good. I loooove dragons. PM me when you post the first part of your actual story, it sounds too interesting to miss!

~Rieda

Riedawriter23 wrote:First of all, great idea in getting all of your information down first. I like the different species that you used and how you described each one. My favorite were the Haliomon. Really descriptive, they sound beautiful. The only thing that I noticed was your weight range for dragons. 600-4000 pounds isn't that much when you think about it. Is it because they work? Besides that everything else was good. I loooove dragons. PM me when you post the first part of your actual story, it sounds too interesting to miss!

~Rieda

Yeah, pretty much. Combat dragons train rigorously, becuase of all the things that can happen quickly mid-air. So, fat is almost non-existent.

Any who, I'd like to make a slight announcement. I have created the world map for the story. Two new races have been added; the Gnomes and the Elves. Elves are sharp-shooters; the best riflemen in the world. However, I find need to reference an old cliché; they live behind the forest of Illusion, in secrecy. They don't care about the rest of the world. However, due to the lack of minerals in their country, they have active trade with the dwarves.

Gnomes are creatures smaller than dwarves. They are masters at botany and sorcery. They are renowned for their farming, which greatly exceeds the capabilities of even -the dragon country- who have dragons help them. The gnomes are little and arrogant for the most part when it comes to foreigners. Their country is allied with -evil country-, but the public even treats them with some less than deserved hospitality. Their sorcerers are masters at defending and attacking, and often join -evil country- war campaigns. Gnomes are generally friendly when it comes to their own people however.