The heat, previously welcomed, bore down on them now, an unseen snake that smothered in the darkness.
Its a metaphor, but you propose that I change it to a simile. Does it not work as it is? Anyone else have thoughts on this?
The room isnt important, it never was. If you were in a meeting with a demon trying to make a pact to save your country, would you be giving the room a detailed look? I dont think so, your attention would be completely taken by the demon which is why I gave only impressions. It was deliberate. As to how they got there--the shadow around them shifted and flowed--implies magic, on the demon's behalf that is and as he doesnt explain it to them and thus the characters do not know, I had no place in telling YOU (the reader) just exactly how it was done.
In any story I prefer being vague then stating outright, 'well this is how it works.'
Thanks again, dettie, and all involved. Tis much appreciated.
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