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Sharpe wrote:Chapter 1
Awakening

Dont forget to capitalize he he slowly climbed out of bed stretching his legs and back as he did every morning.

capitalize he:arrow: he pulled on his tunic and trousers and got ready for another day at the mill.
Shaedl didn’t like fighting he liked to imagine the wars weren’t going on and that people weren’t dyeing in Cladveer should be capitalized cladveer but they were for over 4 years now the rebel warders and the empire had been fighting you should say something like there were thousands dead or some thing to not make it sound over powering btu still dramatic thousands dead it needs a comma millions wounded and none not no no were safe.
He believed in the empire to protect him commma, you need to say that the beast were there try saying "for" or something else or else just a comma for the best part strange beasts lurked outside the empire you need a nouther comma or something before you naem the creatures shadveir and mornglas and the worst of all undead. Huran did not know what a shadveir or a mornglas looked like but he had heard brief descriptions from people in the larger city’s about attacks on the smaller villages like you need to capitalize the villages names graystone yard and castle view hamlet. But he just believed they were tales sung about by bards and troubadours. capitalize The the shadveir were told that they were like wolf men fury all over but wielded weapons and shields and wore armour you need a comma they were fowl creatures they could tear a village apart in a matter of minutes. capitalize over 8 feet foot tall some said comma but he doubted this greatly as he had only you dont need the ever, it sounds kind of strange when you say it ever seen humans and small timid tame creatures like deer or mountain goat, nothing rare and aggressive.

He tightened his bow string round him and then set off for work he bumped into his friend eldra and said hello but kept walking, he jumped over the style and past a herd of mountain cattle they were strange creatures as small as a sheep but with large black horns and sharp little fangs that hung out from their furry lips. One came over to see him but it just sniffed him and pulled an old bit of bread from his jacket.
He always had a thought that the mountain cattle may be slightly more intelligent than humans gave them respect for.
Every month several of them would disappear and the later that week large flying creatures were thought to have been sawn no body would of guessed as these flying creatures had sleek green scales and no wool on them but still every once in a while people would see one fly low over head and catch a glimpse of a little piece of wool in between their scales some people thought they killed their cattle some people thought they were friends with their cattle and just wanted to help search for their friends but some like huran thought that the cattle were secretly evolving into these shining beasts, magical and mysterious as it were huran thought nothing more of it until he glimpsed one fly over head and drop something in the woods ahead.

He only caught a glimpse of a shining green circle fall from the flying beast but he was sure it was something important . as he saw scorch marks were the object had landed he put on an extra burst of speed to get there before anyone else
When he arrived the small rounded stone was cracked in several places. He did now know what it was and picked it up in awe he searched the object for any holes or opening but nothing.
Every once in a while the egg would shake and a bit of the green coating would crumble off and leave a strange smelling dust on the surface it was kept upon. The dust was some sort of magic huran believed as it would mysteriously disappear and then reappear in a different place in his sack but still nothing seemed un usual about it so he put his sack on his back and headed back to the road towards the mill.
Once he was back on the road he heard a terrible noise one louder and more high pitched than he had ever heard. A loud crack stopped the screech . I best everyone in cladveer would have heard that thought huran to himself. Then strangely but suddenly his pack started moving he took the pack off and looked inside their lay a little baby creature half broken out of its egg ( the strange stone)
It nibbled hurans nose as he stared eye to eye with this ugly looking creature. It made a loud burp and then crawled back inside its egg. Huran stared in amazement at this strange THING. What was it he thought to himself? Then it struck him! This must be one of those flying creatures babies. He put his pack back on his back and slowly walked along the road thinking about this strange creature. How would I care for it? How would I feed it? How would I let the others know. Then its annoying screech split his thoughts in half as it screamed as loud as it could into the air.2 huge flying beasts swooped down out of the clouds and landed on the ground in front of him he glared at them awe struck at their beauty and grace. They bowed their heads low and spoke. He couldn’t believe it these creatures could speak??
The beast said ‘greetings earth liver what be that screeching we here from you? Oh sorry great….err?
We are the husglaz we come from a strange desert far from here. Were the water is pure and the people are not corrupt like your earthlings. I am sorry for my husbands rudeness said the other husglaz as it stepped forward we were sent to find you by are master hrothger he is a great and noble king
He is an earthling like yourself but erm how do you say it?... much shorter he comes from under the earth were people are short with big beards and lots of hair. Funny creatures they are. Said the other husglaz. You have been recruited to join a secret army conspiring against the empire. But why? Said huran. The empire have done great things and have helped people live in happiness and harmony why would you want to over throw them? Yes earthling but they have also done very bad deeds in their life time they currently hold hrothgers princess and have been torturing her for information about are secret organisation and location.
Some of the information she did not know in the first place. but she will be hung drawn and quartered in 9 days unless an earthling can charge in and save her. She did not trust any of are kind as some of them are standing guard of her prison sell and doesn’t wish to be drawn into a trap.




Sorry if tis rubbish im only 13 and its my very first peice i had a dream and this is the amount i ahve written up soo far please tell me if i should write on or not?