Critique?

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I am looking for a reason to continue on this poetic journey. I can't show my family my poems, so looks like I'm showing you. But I just want to be criticized. To be told what to do differently. To be told where to go more. If you can, please check out my poem and oblige me.
If Fate were moved by tears, men would offer gold to buy them.
Yet grief still puts them forth, as the tree puts forth leaves.



Why should Caesar just get to stomp around like a giant while the rest of us try not to get smushed under his big feet? Brutus is just as cute as Caesar, right? Brutus is just as smart as Caesar, people totally like Brutus just as much as they like Caesar, and when did it become okay for one person to be the boss of everybody because that's not what Rome is about! We should totally just stab Caesar!
— Gretchen Wieners