I'm not a natural at poetry, so it'd be nice if you critiques could forgive me for this work. Many lines seem forced and the wording at times seem odd, so I wouldn't be surprised if this is bashed to bits. I originally wrote it based on the last stanza, which is a little faulty. Thanks for readin' =]
Oh, and pay mind to punctuation. I never know what to do with it in poems, because I'm not used to writing them.
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I trip over sidewalks, I trip over plants
I trip over pebbles and the hem of my pants
All this as you run you’re able to see
But nevertheless, you can’t catch me
You stumble hastily to retrieve your phone
So you don’t attempt to pursue me alone?
A series of buttons are anxiously pressed
I’d assumed you’d want to clean your own mess
A screech in the background, the slamming of doors
I wonder who I can’t trust anymore
Hold your hands high, they say, don’t pull out a gun
These people aim only to ruin my fun.
A bakery next to me, and I sprint in
The true fun is only about to begin
I ignore annoying questions, blocking out what they say
The people in here only stand in my way
I bound up the stairs, despite their requests
Listening to the police is the bet that’s the best
If I listen to them, I’ll be worse than just dead
At the moment I didn’t care where this window had led
My ankle shoots pains as I land on the ground
Two floors don’t guarantee your fall will be sound
Immediately I get up, and hurry away
I can’t stay still when I have justice to pay
I don’t consider it bad to run from the law
I don’t consider it bad to see the things that I saw
I don’t consider it bad to not know where you’re going
There are few things in this situation that are helpful in knowing
I hide in the shrubbery to prevent being seen
I’m being tailed by a guy who’s barely sixteen?
He’s got his friends with him – some sort of joke?
He should know I’m not one you would want to provoke
I ignore this factor, and keep a watchful eye
If I make the slightest noise, on the spot I’m sure to die
I make eye contact with the boy – shoot, I’ve been seen
I jump to my feet and immediately flee
I see a hotel, and forgetting any plan
I race through the doors, and through the corridors I ran
I can’t draw attention, running, we’re the only ones
I turn around petrified – shit, they have guns
I take a sharp turn, an elevator I spot
I fake another left so I’m not ultimately caught
A couple more steps, doors open, doors close
I make it in right out under their nose
My elbow jabs the button, and I sigh in relief
The last moment I see you, you blink in disbelief
I watch with a smirk as the others race by the door
Realize that I’m smarter than you give me credit for.
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