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She’s suspended,
forever floating
and though her friends are ever gloating,
she’s resigned to wait,
hovering above the ground.
She waits alone and patient,
but time has worn her through
her true color’s glowing blue.
And the tears she cries,
fall before her
as she yearns to land,
feet on firm soil,
but she’s not ripe.
Her friends call to her in pairs
“Soon!" they cry,
but she knows it’s a lie,
for a heart like hers could never
fall in love.
So the tree in which she’s hanging
will forever be her grave,
as she waits with baited breath
for her descent.
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-EDIT-Ok. So I broke it up. Does that help at all? I read it in my mind and where there was supposed to be a pause, I put a comma. Longer pause/end of thoughts I put periods. Breaks are where I sort of stop for breath/link the lines together. Does that do anything for you? Capitalization is now based on the sentences. I changed to italics for "fall" as opposed to all caps. It's supposed to be a pun and irony and that was the whole point of the poem so I think I need something to bring it out. I don't know if people get it.
-Tangerine
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