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Applying for college sounds like an extremely aggravating process. I wish you luck! Anyways, it is a great protrayal of how complicated it school is in modern times. Like how when our parents were our age you could not go to college and still be successful. These days the teachers shove college down your throat! Nice ABACDC rhyme scheme. I like how the poem defines your frustration, actions, and feelings towards college applications. Great work

LOVE IT! hahahah this was funny. and a perfect fit for the contest.... it could be a winner

Hey there!

I myself didn't go to university, so I never had the pleasure of filling out forms and applications. I have friends who did though and this poem of yours describes the way they felt pretty much to the letter.

Applying: you're just so much fun

Now, I know nothing about poetry, so feel free to ignore me, but I think this line would be better if you added an exclamation mark to the end of it. I know this line is supposed to be sarcastic, but I think the sarcasm would work more and be more obvious to the reader if you added the extra punctuation. Like I said before though, feel free to ignore me

Accommodation: that sounds nice.
But if you're going to charge me that much,
I'll be eating beans and rice.

So true. Although in my friend's case it's not 'beans and rice,' but 'McDonalds' I've heard them complain about how poor they are due to how much they have to pay towards fees and rent.

Sorry for not being much help, but I think you did a great job on this

xDudettex