I finally got to the first chapter, but I still haven't edited the prologue. I would recommend reading it to get a better understanding of this anyway though.
Two years previous
Chapter one~
“Seacus, get out of bed! You can’t sleep all day!” Ember calls to me from downstairs. My eyes bolt open, and search frantically for the images that I should be seeing. Then I remember. That life of mine is over; it has been for a year now. Yet, whenever I rouse from my dreamless sleep I manage to forget my identity.
“Seacus, hurry up! I have a surprise for you!” I groan, and pull myself out of bed. Why does she always think that I want surprises? I think, as I search for my clothes in my dresser. Unlike most boys my age I keep my room tidy. Not a hair out of place; every piece of clothing neatly folded, and color coded in my dresser.
My sensitive fingers run over a thin cotton shirt, and some jeans. I pull both on hastily, and then feel my way out of my room. The walls are rough on my fingertips.
I turn and face the kitchen, where the heavy aroma of fried eggs drifts to me. I can feel Embers steady gaze, and I turn my head away. As if I was looking at-
My head explodes with pain. Almost like someone took an axe to my skull. A small whimper escapes my lips, as I fall to my knees. Ember comes rushing over to me; putting an arm around my back, and her other hand on my forehead.
A cold sweat starts to drench my clothes, as I try to fight the nausea and pain. My fingers claw at the wood floor beneath me, and she pulls me closer to her. She says nothing as the throbbing continues, because she knows that I cannot reply to any of her questions. The pain slowly recedes back to my neck and eventually disappears all together.
"I am alright," I whisper, my voice weak, "I just need to rest for a second."
“Do you need some water?” She asks, as she helps me walk over to the couch.
“Sure. “ I reply, and a few seconds later I hear her pumping water from the sink. I gingerly run my fingers along my head. Trying to figure out what is wrong with me.
“Here.” She says, placing the cup in my hand. I take a long gulp, letting the cold and refreshing water roll over my tongue; leaving a metallic aftertaste in its wake. “How many times has it been this month?” She asks.
I count the recurrences in my head, “Five, and they keep getting worse.”
“That is it; I am taking you to the doctors!” She exclaims, “Maybe he will know what is happening.”
“Maybe,” My hand shakes, as I place my cup on the wooden side table, “But as far as I know. This has never happened before anywhere near here.
“We can never be sure, but at least we can get some medicine for you. We will leave after we eat breakfast.”
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The door to the doctor’s office opens; sending a gust of sterile air out into the empty cobblestone street.
“Do you have an appointment?” A woman’s shrill voice calls to us from our right.
“No, but this is important.” Ember says, walking up closer to the voice. I walk to one of the chairs at the side of the room. This room is familiar territory, so I do not need a guide to navigate it.
“Hmm, quite, but seeing as you do not have an appointment…”
“I don’t need a stupid appointment! Just tell Henry that the Olson family needs him for a moment!” Ember shouts at the receptionist.
“Will do, will do…as soon as he finishes his break.” She says, with a bitter sharpness to her tone. A smirk dances across my face, she must be new.
“You are useless! Henry! May I have a word?” Ember shouts into the back office.
“Ember, is that you?” Footsteps hurry towards us. “Ah, and young Seacus too! My you two have grown!” I flash a quick smile in his general direction.
“Sorry to barge in like this, but may we have a quick word? We have to be somewhere in a half an hour, but this should not take long.”
“Yes, yes of course, anything for you two, back into my office then.”I stand up, and follow the footsteps into the back room. “How can I be of service?” He asks.
“You see, ever since the accident Seacus has been having massive headaches, and they are only getting worse. We were wondering if you had heard of anything similar happening before.”
He considered the question for a moment, “No, I believe that this is an original case, but I can look around, just to be sure. In the meantime, let me see if I can get any pain medications for you.” He said walking up closer to where I sat. “Where did it hurt the most?” He asks, and I touch the base of my skull.
“Thought it might be so,” He pauses, “It is your occipital lobe, the part of your brain that allows you to see.”
“Go figure.” I mutter under my breath.
Also, change the 'was' to 'were': 'As if I 
Here's an example: 
I want to know Seacus's relationship to Ember. Right now it's so undefined-- she could be a mother, a sister, a love, a grandma. You haven't given us any description of her (yes, I know he can't see, but he can remember what he used to see or muffle his head in her long, silky hair (lover), wrap his arms around her vast waistline (plump relative). I understand if you need to keep something about the relationship a secret, but at least give us an approximate age so we can eliminate some relationship possibilities. 
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