Writing a Letter

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Everyday, I write a letter.

I grab a sheet of paper, white and crisp. As I grasp it, I can see a crease appear, marring the blank surface. The wind dances in the room, sending chills down my spine. It’s as cold as death in here! I carry the paper to my desk and set it down next to my multitude of pens. Before I start writing, I shut the window, trying not to glance down at the scene below. The wind won’t blow here anymore. Next, I go to the hearth and rekindle the fire, basking the room in an orange glow and warming me up considerably.

I head back to my desk. I look over my array of writing instruments, trying to decide what to use. Pens, pencils, brushes, and quills are all arranged neatly in rows, all of different colors and sizes. I select a swan feather quill, as white as the page I am about to write on. It is soft and smooth, just like the feel of clay. The feather lightly tickles my hand and I smile, just a little bit.

Next, I look over at the pots of ink. Most of the jars holding the ink are only half-full, the only indication that they have been used. Otherwise, they are pristine and clean, just like the day they were bought. Some are small, some are slightly larger than normal. And they come in all colors of the rainbow and everything in between. I glance at the hues of red, green, and blue, before finally selecting the darkest shade of black I can find. It looks like the glossy coat of a raven.

Slowly, I dip the end of my quill into the jar. Quickly, the ink soaks into it, turning the shaft dark. Expertly taking just enough ink, I take out the quill. A single, fat drop of ink rolls of the tip and lands in the jar, creating a slight ripple. The tip glistens in the light of the fire. For the briefest of moments, I close my eyes.

It is time.

Swiftly, while the ink is still wet, I set the tip down at the very top of the page. I do not hesitate. With dizzying speed, my hand guides the quill, forming letters, words. Every few words, I pause to dip the end of my quill back into liquid night before continuing. The scratching of my quill is the only other sound in the room besides the crackling of the fire.

I do not pause to read what I have written. Cursive, flowing words just blossom onto the page. With grace only attained through years of practice, I write. One word turns into a sentence, one sentence into a paragraph, one paragraph into a full page. In a matter of minutes, the paper is full with every bit of my soul.

Only then do I stop to read what I have written. I look back on what I have done, searching for mistakes, and to see if I have said all I want to say. I check to see if every last detail is perfect. Though I spot mistakes, and though I still have the quill in my hand, I write nothing. The paper isn’t meant to be changed any more than it already has been. In the heat of the fire, I let the ink dry, preserving the words. I take an envelope and seal the letter within. I jot down the address and put a stamp on the corner.

Then, I just sit there in silence, thinking, remembering. After I am done, I take the envelope. The paper feels rough in my hands, a sharp contrast to the feather quill in hand mere moments ago. Making sure that the seal is secure, I stand. One final deep breath. Turning around, I take a few steps-

-and throw the letter into the fire. The flames crackle delightedly and rise to feast on their tender morsel. The dry paper burns away to ashes in seconds. Wisps of smoke rise and disappear. As I watch the dancing tongues of flame, I have but one thought in mind. A thought that comforts my aching hand, my empty soul. I smile.

The dead don’t read.
Last edited by WaterVyper on Thu Dec 18, 2008 11:31 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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It's brillinatly written, is my first comment. I loved reading this. It's refreshingly nice, with a slight rustic touch. I love the way you have ended it, the imagery and texture, you have described are really good. You descriptions were awesome. Though I guess the title could've been different or maybe my expectations for that title were different.

I guess my favourite bit would have to be:
"I do not pause to read what I have written. Cursive, flowing words just blossom onto the page. With grace only attained through years of practice, I write. One word turns into a sentence, one sentence into a paragraph, one paragraph into a full page. In a matter of minutes, the paper is full with every bit of my soul. "

"Turning around, I take a few steps-

-and throw the letter into the fire. The flames crackle delightedly and rise to feast on their tender morsel. The dry paper burns away to ashes in seconds. Wisps of smoke rise and disappear. As I watch the dancing tongues of flame, I have but one thought in mind. A thought that comforts my aching hand, my empty soul. I smile.

The dead don’t read."

It gives a nice sense of emptiness which I happen to like.
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Hi WaterVyper,

I really enjoyed the piece. Here are a couple of tips that I hope will help:
The wind whips through

soft and smooth, just like silk

The above two quotes are essentially extremely cliched. They have been used time and time again by writers through the centuries. Unfortunately that means that they have become overused and should therefore be avoided. You can come up with better similes yourself, to fill those gaps.

Then, just a couple of nitpicks:
set it down next to the multitude of pens that I have

I think that this quotation is a little strange, perhaps you want to say "set it down next to my multitude of pens"?

I'd chop the start of paragraph: "That is when", just begin: "I head..."

I look back on what I have done, searching for mistakes and to see if I have said all I want to say.

Perhaps, "I look back on my handiwork, searching for mistakes, and ensuring that I have said everything that I wanted to say."


The end, I feel, is a superb piece, very well carried out indeed. Well done!

Have a good one! ;)
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But I have promises to keep,
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep.
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As promised!

trying not to glance down at the scene below.


You never explain what the "scene below" is.

Some are small, some are slightly larger than normal.


Replace the comma with a semi-colon.

And they come in all colors of the rainbow and everything in between.


Don't start a sentence with and. Nix it.

rolls of


I think you meant rolls off.

One final deep breath.


Sorry, I can't stand sentence without a verb. How about "I draw" or "I take"

This piece was excellently written. I honestly didn't find many mistakes.

I'm sorry, I know this review sucked.
Check my other reviews, they are much better ^_^
Darn you for being such a perfect writer! I have nothing to nit-pick!

All in All

Your description was great. The grammar was fine, nothing too bad. There is no real plot to critique because nothing really happened. I think this is a good length. Any longer and the piece would have become boring. It's a good piece of writing. Not particularly memorable or entertaining, but good.

Sorry, again, this review was just awful.

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This was so sad. I reacted rather strongly at the end, because you spent so much time describing the creation of this letter, only to destroy it in the end.

Stupid logic question, but I have to ask: why does the character put a stamp on the letter that they clearly intend to burn? Is it out of respect for the dead, spending the money for stamps that are only going to burn? I just found that rather jarring. Perhaps that just marks me as cheap... *sheepish*

A thought that comforts my aching hand, my empty soul. I smile.

The dead don’t read.


I'm a little confused as to how that is a comforting thought, considering how the narrator just poured their heart and soul into this letter, only to burn it. And their only consolation is that the recipient can't read it because they are dead?

Anyway, don't take my nitpicks too seriously. That's mainly my all-too-literal self kicking in inconveniently. I loved this story. The writing was beautiful. I just sat and read this in a comfortable daze of appreciating the wonderful writing. Absolutely marvelous.

Keep on writing!

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Um, when you say, "Everyday, I write a letter," does that mean that the wind blows everyday, and you close the window everyday, everyday, you stop and decide to use the same quill, etc, etc?

It looks like the glossy coat of a raven.

For some odd reason, I dislike this sentence. "Its tone is like that of a raven's glossy coat", maybe. But that's just me.

With dizzying speed, my hand guides the quill, forming letters, words.

People don't usually write at dizzying speeds. I always thought of dizzying speeds as 70km/h, round and round in circles. It's a bit of an exaggeration.

The flames crackle delightedly and rise to feast on their tender morsel.

May I suggest you put "fire" in place of "flames"? You said "flames" again a few sentences later.

This is pretty good, especially the descriptions. It's pleasantly short. I'm not very impressed by it, but it's a good piece anyway. Don't mind me, I'm a little weird in tastes.

Cheers,
Lily.

P.S: By the way, did you know that some Chinese believe that burning prayer goods sends them to the dead?
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