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I think Silly Sydstix caught most of the mistakes, but there's a few things I would like to mention. I. Your dialogue needs a lot of work conventions wise. You ...

Very interesting. I liked this. And yes, I agree with chocoholic: this is very original. The difference was in their faces. In the daytime, you could see kindness on anyone’s ...

I just finished reading: Blood and Chocolate. It was horrible. I thought it would be all sweet and romantic, but I don't think it is. It was also a little ...

This was very good, but I agree that you need to work on your punctuation a bit. This was very original and I really enjoyed this. I can relate to ...

Hey Talking_Pinata, I don't think I've seen you around before. Well, hi! First thing, this post was a bit too short. Next time, try making it longer. In my opinion, ...

So much better. Thanks for editing. It drew me in right from the beginning and it made me want to continue reading. I was disappointed when it ended. "I'm sorry, ...

I agree with Doctor Kitty on the bit about: baby on the doorstep being used a lot. It has been used a lot, so it's kind of annoying seeing that ...

This was awesome. I can totally feel for Carolina. I have one nit-picky thing though. Why must people I never interact with and never get to know hate me so ...

Hey Ayra, This was really good, don't get me wrong, but like the other people who reviewed this, I'm a bit confused. I think I get it, but most people ...

To tell you the truth, I didn't finish reading this. I stopped half way through. It started out okay, the descriptions were good, dialogue was good, and characters were okay. ...

Could you write stories based off of songs and get them published without getting sued by the band who made them? Also, is writing a story based off of a ...

*Looks confused* Huh? I didn't really see anything similar except a couple of things. You should continue writing. Don't worry about 'stealing' ideas. I'll tell you when that happens. :) ...

Hello seeminglymeaningless, Thanks for reviewing my story, so, I of course, will review yours! One, this was a very good story. I like how the story is going so far ...

Hey, I like this. It's a little long to be doing a line by line critique, but I'll give you some pointers. It was a little confusing how you kept ...

No no, not too long. I just took a long time to read it. :) Hey, Okay. I really liked this. Your descriptions were nice and the pacing was good. ...