~nariel~

No need to apologize; we all make mistakes. It is very good. :)

Hey, I just reviewed something of yours! Ha ha. Anyways, I hate to repeat myself, but again, you have to have 2 reviews before you post something. This piece was ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! There's a rule on here about doing two reviews before you post your own stories. Anyways, onto your story. I don't really understand why you have ...

Hey, don't mean to sound harsh or mean when I review this (just a heads up).There were some good parts (see end of review) to it, but it also needs ...

Hey, great prologue. There is a rule on here about doing two reviews before you post something. Good work though and tell me when you post more. ~N~

Thanks for commenting! I understand now that I basically info dumped *face palm* I should have known better. Thanks again and I'll work harder at spreading all this stuff out. ...

Yeah, I know this is really short and I'm kinda info dumping about each of the characters, but I thought it would be easier just to introduce them in the ...

This was an excellent story. I hardly found anything wrong with it and it made me laugh. The beginning was a little confusing, but once I go into the story, ...

This story has made my day. You've done so well in explaining the pains of having an unattainable crush. Kudos to you!!! Obviously, I can relate, because I have been ...

Yikes. I didn't get this at all. It seemed to me like a bunch of ramblings. You start off with Mrs. Rogers wathcing some TV show, then you jump to ...

Hello! I have a couple things I want to point out to you, but your story made me laugh (in the good way). I thought it was very sharp and ...

This isn't really the best thing I've ever written but I thought it was cute. There will be 3 parts and I have the Intro and part 1 done. It's ...

Hello! I haven't been on here in a while so please forgive me if my critique is choppy. First, your beginning was pretty good. It souned like you were writing ...

Hello! Azilia got the punctuation errors. So I'll just give my opinions on characterization, plot, etc. 1. Okay, your characterization was pretty good. She's got a life and feelings, but ...

Hey Wolf, I don't think I've critiqued any of your work yet, so here it goes. :twisted: Oh, and most of this is plain nitpicky, so don't take it too ...