~nariel~

Oooo. This is nice. I like the shading you did. I can't draw for crap, so this is very good. =) *claps* So you're basically redrawing what you want your ...

This was very sweet although it was a little short. There isn't really much here to critique, but I'll do my best. :wink: The beginning didn't really draw me in. ...

I like this! A very nice twist on Little Red Riding Hood. I have a couple of nitpicks. As usual, I could not extinguish the thirst for adventure that burned ...

I agree with niccy_v on what she said. But, I'm glad you enjoyed writing this. :) Show a lot more emotion. Levi may never come back; I should see tons ...

All the posters above me caught your mistakes so I'm just going to go on about how much I liked this. The description was great; I actually felt like I ...

Hello and welcome to YWS. Sorry you're not getting any sleep. On your song: Well, this was interesting. It kind of reminded me of A Little Piece of Heaven by: ...

This was extremley well written and I really liked it. Your vocabulary and grammar are well done, so I don't have any comments there. There are some parts in the ...

I agree with Plushoriam. With novels, you can span out the whole story over lots of chapters. I think novels keep my attention more as long as the chapters end ...

*Hugs KJ* Thank you! On the dialogue: Ugh. I hate doing punctuation for dialogue. I always get confused. Period or comma? I will, however, look something up online to help ...

So I haven't written in a while and this is my current project. It does have some fantasy elements, so I posted it here. Bear with me because this is ...

Hey. I saw this and decided to give it my best review. Hopefully, you find it helpful and if you need more clarifying on what I meant, don't be afraid ...

Chosenofair: It's okay, no hurt feelings. Now, that I look back on it, my character has this 'woe is me' kind of voice. Ack, it wasn't what I was looking ...

Wow. I didn't expect this much feedback. Thank you all for your helpful reviews. I don't know when I'm going to be starting this up again. I just kind of ...

:) Ha ha. Yes that is much better. Sorry if I seemed too picky. It really is a great poem.

*Rolls eyes* This was so random yet so funny. I loved how you made fun of Bella. Weeeee ballerina!!! Hahahahahahahah. Good job. Nariel *GOLD STAR*