~nariel~

Hey, I've been working on rewriting That Voice and this is one of the rewrites I've come up with. I've changed the characters dramatically, but the plot is still pretty ...

I liked this. It had tons of emotion and drama. Plus, I can relate to wanting someone to stay with me, even if they don't belong. There was scarlet around ...

Hm, I liked the title of this, very unique. I'm just going to critique as I read, so here we go. “This is the worst day of my life,” Cheryl ...

Welcome to YWS! I haven't been on in a while, so I'm sorry if my review sucks. :) The poster above me got the major nitpicks. “I had a dream ...

Hello! You're off to a good start, but I have a few suggestions. All his life he had feared death as a cold, damp plague eating away at a defenceless ...

Nice. This keeps getting better and better. I didn't have any major issues with this chapter, but just some nitpicky things. But it was three months – three long, agonizing ...

Woah. I like it; it has this haunting kind of atmosphere to it. Love it! Nariel

Hey, here's Chapter 2. Things should start to explain themselves a little bit. Hope you like it. Nariel Chapter 2: Much Closer Jimmy’s Point of View There are two things ...

I agree, this will be very cool when you draw it all out. =) I think you use the words "the boy" a little bit too much. So either you ...

Hey this was very well written and I loved reading it. I do have a couple things though. I heard the siren’s not long after, but I was already almost ...

Author's Note: If you didn't read the first part, I suggest you do because then all of this will make a little bit more sense. I was planning on fleshing ...

Hey, I really enjoyed this chapter and I like how you've made it so original (for a vampire story). =) I simple loathed this, for I had to chase him ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I'm glad you think YWS is marvelous, because I think it's marvelous too. We have a 2:1 rule on here though. You need to do ...

Hmmm. I like the title you have now. Lake Girls is really catchy and I like it. Besides, there are a lot of titles out there that barely have to ...

Oh my god, I LOVED this. I was laughing so hard, I was crying. I have a love/hate thing for Twilight but the parady...Oh my gosh, I loved the parady. ...