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This was... different, lol. Good, but different. Just a few tips. You should be very careful of how much action and description you put in one sentence. Some of your ...

This is really good. A lot of good descriptions! "I'd been crying too, my cheeks all sticky and tense." You need one more comma before "too". Be careful of your ...

It was soooo cute! This short was really good except for the grammar and mechanical mistakes. but that's why it's up for critiquing, right? lol. anyways. "She loved Christmas, it ...

Chapter One “Flame, can’t you just stand still for one more minute?” she demanded, shoving futilely against her beloved stallion’s shoulder. He seemed to grin down at her and turned ...

this was really cool. it sounds like something that would happen in my school, lol. just a few little grammar mistakes in there and the italics were kind of confusing ...

what exactly is the meaning of the title? is it one of the characters' names? other than those little confusions, it was really really good and cute.

Prologue The moon drifted in and out of the few clouds floating through the night sky, casting an eerie glow around the movie theater’s parking lot. It was empty, the ...

Hi! I'm new, just recently and i'm looking for an actual critique group that I could join. Umm... I'll be 18 here in a few months (May 11) and sometimes ...