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Third: Show don't tell (you're going to hear this a million times): so describe the feelings, places etc. a bit more. I have here an example I don’t… know” the ...

I always thought that Harry Potter's side cast was a bit undeveloped and rather shallow for most of the book, simply appearing and being fleshed out for a single book ...

Not to say anything bad about this novel I've never looked at, but unless your plot is long and has no 'filler' don't cut it. A longer work does not ...

I have a story, which few have taken notice on here, titled Gaea and much of the work remains unposted, but I've started to lose some impetus over an issue ...

(I am fairly good with this format, but I have to ask, since Paladins are slightly overpowered (for level) and simply MUST kill evil, undead.. etc on sight, what does ...

Very tame for an R rated post, wouldn't even make PG-13 in my eyes. First person is so confining, but you seem to have experienced it before and worked quite ...

As I am continuing to work out the story some more I keep returning to the prologue and keep finding new ways to make it better and improve upon it. ...

Well, you kept all names nice and proper so I have one less thing to rant off about in this review. Let's handle the key offending issue. The dialogue driven ...

Nutty pretty much sums it up, so I'll just go and make note of my pet peeve. Midori, Sean, Micheal. Which name is out of place? Try to use names ...

Pi has a pattern. The pattern is its formulation, but the formulation patternization is not the pattern you speak of, so you are both wrong and right from your viewpoint. ...

I'm a boy, but because of my nature I really tend to steer clear of the 'fanfiction section' as it just makes me rage. Sometimes I will start reading work ...

1. Writing on my computer. (Just feels better that way.) 2. I need music and lately it has been some of the 250 Touhou albums floating around on torrent, particularly ...

I'm going to spare us all the hassle of a line through line bit here and opt for a quick run through which I hope will not offend you. You ...

Hi! Sorry if I am lazy about quotes, but I want to handle this work paragraph by paragraph. On to the review ------------- Lord of Dragon's: (You mean Dragons. -'s ...

Hope this doesn't bother you too much, but to clarify some instances. 1. Description preceding introduction to show who was important and why. 2. It is a title, but I'll ...