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Ah thanks a lot! Yes, I do see what you mean about the intro being too long! I've corrected it. If anything jumps out at you again please tell me ...

Four stories in poetic form! Of sugar words and frozen throne. Master of the Forbidden Spell, Love. The holy dagger that killed God. Metsu

Sounds like what Krupp said in my thread. Wait, exactly the same! Lol. It takes a lot of work to outline and do all the legwork on setting out a ...

Hi again. You took my advice on the name thing I see. Works better for you I hope. Anyways, let me point out an area of trouble. -------- “Your father ...

(Good for you LaReina. Too bad Naruto is still being a wuss while Team 7 gets all the action now.)

(Aww, sorry. We should have someone fill in for Yahiko as usual with a typical D&D player character switch so that our team does not lose a key member and ...

Smaur, not to be critical, but from the way Bolt writes (I am part of the storybook he leads), skipping parts that are difficult would be absolutely catastrophic. Writing for ...

First person is just plain restrictive for novel/novella writing. As much as I try to practice I for character thought maps, I just cannot do it when it comes to ...

Oi. If you get past the 30 page barrier you have this second, ending barrier which is just as bad as the first one. Keep at it, really push yourself ...

Yeah, I usually do about 1-2k in a sitting, and if I push hard no more then 6k or so a day typically. By my 12 pt times font, 23 ...

If the supporting character is vocal and the main character is not, this problem cannot really be rectified without destroying the personality and dialogue of what has already happened. I ...

I'm guessing the money is not redeemable for legal tender. :P 23 pages, nice. Is it double spaced and tabbed, or single spaced? Word counts are often more revealing then ...

A healer being a rare to pull off professionally? Then apparantly all my work just entered the original bin on that one. And I was a good healer for five ...

A bit drastic... Well, in any case here's my take. Sometimes it is okay, sometimes it is not okay. I am going to draw upon the murder mysteries of Detective ...

A piece like this conflicts with two characters from which the reader has no background. Their is no tension between the two and V's advances are just unnatural and a ...