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I love your ability to kill off the main character the first chapter--I would have hesitated until the third. Just wanted to start off with that!!! ^^ I think that ...

Wonderfully written! I praise you as the rest have--it's a wonderful thing to preach (if such a word can be used--what about 'poetically approached instead?) about these things and admit ...

If you please, Pengu. ^^ -x- Birdie

Name: Taigel Matthias Race: human Age: 20 Team: -whichever you need- Background: Taegel has always been a very talkative girl--she can start a conversation about anything with anyone. She had ...

I see I didn't do quite as well as I'd hoped. ^^ Much better, though, much better! I can't really change the paragraphing problems--that's not how I have it saved ...

The Arms Dealer, Chapter One, Completely Revised June 5, 2008. I tried to follow all of your advice (I saved it...), so I hope that it turned out the way ...

Gorgeous!!! I'm left with no nitpicks...but I don't need to nitpick your work, anyway! I find it much better than my own, your knowledge of this particular time in the ...

Everything flowed wonderfully to me except for this stanza... The letter was, in places- a reasonable way to cheat, maybe even sway this old codger. But as for giving me ...

(I love discussing history with you :grin:) Disinfectants were invented during the 1800s--I had to write a paper about Joseph Lister and carbolic acid. (Listerine got it's name from him!!!) ...

Beautiful! All of your works are, though, so that isn't much of a surprise, is it?! I want to go into medicine and was overwhelmingly giddy when we learned about ...

-I'll check back with you tomorrow, then. ^^-

I must admit, the title dragged me in as well! I thought, "Now, what does Paul Revere do drunk, eh???" and thus, I was obliged to read it. Marvelous! I ...

I find myself reading all of the things in your portfolio now, Jess. ^^ Lucky you!!! Beautiful--I loved it! I agree that Welcome is a nice name--a bit odd, but ...

-Let me know when you start the sequel. ^^ I'm finally not busy (school's ended) but it's senseless to jump in.-

'Ello, Yoyo!!! ^^ I know that you're busy, but I came across this and temptation was too much to resist!!! Critique it if and when you have time! Feel free ...