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Hello there I actually quite like this very much. It's bold and deep. I have actually not seen the Virginia tech poem before but this is pretty good. I loved ...

Hello there There are a few suggestions I would like to make towards your writing. First of all, I usually don't go to dinner, or even eat at all. I ...

Hello there Welcome to yws! :smt001 I actually enjoyed this very much. It was very creative. I think that there was a general good flow through out the poem and ...

Hello there Well, first of all what I noticed and liked about this piece was that there were very few spelling mistakes which is good. You also have good writing ...

Hello there Abby, my four year old neighbor, is who I'm suppose to be babysitting. But she's babysitting me, because I can't seem to stay still for a whole half ...

Hello there Well, the poem is actually interesting and I liked it. But there are a few things I thought need some attention. Firstly, that spelling mistake pointed out by ...

Hello there Definitely a good interesting start. But maybe you should increase the length a bit. Also, I thought that even though there was good writing in your piece, there ...

Hello there Well, I am going to be very honest. This poem does not really tell a story. I don't feel anything. It is like reading a bunch of facts ...

Hello there This is a lovely poem. You did a pretty good job at keeping me drawn into the poem or drawing my attention until the end. he holds her ...

Hello there I have to say that I am impressed. Now, you just showed me poetry at its level best. I can feel this, the emotion the unique structure, everything. ...

Hello there Wow, I liked your poem. I thought that you had wonderful ideas as I read it. I think though that repeating If I had my own world throughout ...

Hello there I sucks in all who allow it to I don't know but this sentence is not right, maybe I'm not reading it correctly. Anyways, I totally agree with ...

Hello there Well this is a really deep piece. I liked it, it gave me a lot to think about after I read it. I especially liked the first stanza, ...

Hello there and welcome Well, you definitely have good command of the language I can give you that much. There are a few things I can suggest: Firstly, try to ...

Hello there I actually love your poem. It is really deep and I thought you expressed your emotions well though sometimes I thought that they were over exaggerated like, But ...