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Hey So what is your favourite song of the '70s? I can't decide, but I'm lovin' Bohemian Rhapsody by Queen! :smt004

Hello there Well, I liked it. There wasn't much happening though but I liked how simple it was. You definitely showed good writing skills; good grammar, good descriptive tools, good ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) Alright, this is a promising story line. It's not boring, there is suspense, I have the urge to read on until the end. ...

Hello there :D Alright, before I comment I will just outline mistakes I spotted as I read, 1. I noticed that you had a tendency of using "don't" instead of ...

Hello there. Well, I think I liked it. I liked your metaphors, they were deep. The problem I had with this poem is that there is very little in it. ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :D Alright, now I read your piece and I think that your grammar needs a lot of work. I am guessing that English is ...

Found this in my archives. I wouldn't be surprised if you think it's a little weird! :D Sit, We have to talk. Did you travel well? How is the weather? ...

Hello there Jeanette and welcome to yws! I think this a good poem. I liked it. The poem does have a lot of emotion. Is my structure really a sure ...

Hello there Alright, so this poem was pretty deep. I was drawn in from the word go. It has enough emotion and I am satisfied. You don't know what it's ...

You stare at me My friend, your friends; As I walk alone. Don’t blink though As you might miss The helplessness in my eyes, The worry in my walk, The ...

Hello there Emelyeverafter and welcome to yws! I think that peanut19 did a good job at pinpointing the spelling mistakes. I think your poem needs some punctuation so that some ...

Hello there Sageleaf and welcome to yws! :) Well, I liked the idea of the poem but it was nothing special really. I did not feel enough emotion in the ...

Hello there Flowerchild So, it turns out that I really loved this poem. It was creative the way you addressed different aspects of you memories to your parents, loved that. ...

Hello there This was an interesting piece :) I was actually worried when I started reading because I thought it was just one of those 'love poems', but it surprised ...

Hello there I am no expert, but I will just tell you what I think alright? :wink: Anyways, this has potential but maybe lacks some suspense, just a tad bit. ...