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Hello there I will just come out and say that I found repeating "Through glass I see" very annoying. It threw everything off a bit. Maybe you could have just ...

Hello there I will comment just on your piece. I thought it was just fine. It lacked a lot of emotion and suspense. The storyline is nothing new which is ...

Hello there Funny conversation Mr. McKilt and Daniel are having here. I really like how you wrote Mr. Mckilt's accent down, it was different and entertaining and I could really ...

Hello there I thought I'd do the honours. I'm definitely liking this. Firstly, the title of your book is so sophisticated and eye catching which is why I was drawn ...

Hello there I like this poem and the consistent rhyming. I thought that it was nothing different from my point of view but it was greatly written anyhow. I'm not ...

Hello there Thought I'd return the gesture. Well first of all I should say that there is nothing wrong with bragging about your 'achievements', congrats on winning the contests. Now, ...

Thank you guys so much for the tips, I will definitely work on the problem areas. I'm glad you liked it.

Hello there and welcome to YWS! I will first start off with corrections “As I, and everyone else in this room said before, get the hell out!” Mattox shouted at ...

Hello there This was not bad at all. My only problem was that I felt it lacked some emotion, just a little bit. But that was it. I liked this ...

Hello there LastPaladin Although I could not finish reading through the story, I just had to say I like the way you write. You showed great vocabulary which was precise ...

His left shoe was worn out more than this right shoe. He noticed this as he walked down the quiet street of a suburb. The air was thin and cold; ...

Hey there Great storyline you've got here, I could see your talent as a writer as I read through the story. I saw no spelling mistakes so that was good. ...

Hey there I really loved this you know. It was deep and sad and relatable (I lost my dog too a while ago). I think you managed to display a ...

Hello there Humph, thought provoking; that's all I can say. I liked it a lot. At first though I had absolutely no idea what was going on but after a ...

Hello there I thought I would do the honors. Anyway, I really liked this a lot. I could clearly see your talent as a writer as I read this. Now ...