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Hello there This was very creative. I liked the last stanza particularly the way it unfolded. I thought though that some of the rhyming was a bit forced, My angel ...

Hello there and welcome once again. I thought this poem lacked a lot of poetic elements and at times it seemed as if I was reading an abstract or idea ...

Hey there pencilgirl! I thought I'd do the honours. I liked the poem, it was simple yet adorable. Just had a problem with the fact that there was no punctuation, ...

A world gone by is a world found new A change of time is a change of Hope A decade, a century, an age gone by, Leaving behind a Torch ...

Hello there Very nice. I'm not an art expert so there is nothing I'm gonna suggest but just comment on what I thought. I like the colour of the picture ...

Hello there Thought I'd do the honors! :) Anywho, this was an interesting approach to a poem. I liked the reference of the balloon to real life. I was distracted ...

Hello there clarakingofsnow Hmmm...well, to be honest I'm a little dissapointed; I don't know, you had my hope so high when I got to "ask the stars". I kind of ...

Hello there Jon :) I love it! It's been a while since I've seen poetry of this kind, so deep and real. It was emotional and your choice of words ...

Hello there :) This is my first review of the month! Anyway, your poem is really cute. I had a problem though with the first stanza. To me it was ...

Hello there iheartbooks I am no expert at punctuation either, but what I would suggest when you write a poem, punctuate line by line as you would a sentence. For ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS :) I loved this this story. The sky mirrors the water, just a slur of cloudy grey. Nice! Great use of imgery here. I ...

Hello there You are right about your tenses. I think your other problem is grammar, you need more practice to correct that. Another thing I noticed; you did not develop ...

Hello there :) I think bubblegum has pretty much outlined the spelling errors in the piece. Next time, try to proofread your submission.This really did not strike me as a ...

Hello there I liked this poem. But the repeating...not so much. Maybe you could have separated the poem into stanzas to try and make it work. You know, the 'have ...

Hello there sillyducky In a hot tub on a starry night, six girls sit. The warm water swirls around their bodies as they giggle and laugh about random things and ...