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Okay, I'm working on this novel but I'm stuck in the first chapter. I'm not sure whether I'm revealing too much too soon and I feel it's too boring to ...

Hello there AudreyHearts and welcome to YWS! :) This poem definitely has some potential. However, I found it a little shady; it not deliver enough to leave me satisfied, but ...

Hello there iheartbooks :) I think you did a pretty good job on this one although it was a bit cliche. I definitely love the truth that came out of ...

Hello there :) And welcome to YWS! This was an interesting poem. I liked how you approached the idea. It was also quite deep and it made me think; I ...

Hello there :) I can see you had a lot to say when you wrote this. But, I personally thought that this should have ended here Alone in this life, ...

Hello there This was actually not bad at all for a first try, in fact I would have NEVER guessed. I liked the parts where you used "dare not" in ...

Hello there :) I kind of disliked this on some occasions. Firstly, the idea is nothing new so for this particular direction I was looking forward to seeing something different ...

Hello there :) I personally think you should have stopped at the first part. I like how you manipulated your words to go around the poem, very creative even though ...

Hello there :) Hmm...I did not like this very much as poem. Call me old fashioned but it did not embody your typical poem. To me it sounded like the ...

Hello there cousin and eh...cousin :? :lol: I thought this was fantastic, the metaphor part. I liked how you meshed the similarity between the lightning and anger. However I kind ...

Hello there Artlover and welcome to YWS! :) This is very fitting that your first addition has to do with art. This was a very simple straight to the point ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) So, I thought that this was a great story. However it was so short. Another problem I had was that you seemed to ...

Hello there :) I am with sodapoplunchbox on this one. It was very hard to follow the story at times. I have one suggestion to solve this problem; reduce your ...

Hello there I loved this a lot. It was definitely something different from what I've seen lately. I loved the movie the color purple, although this almost captured what you ...

Hello there :) A definite great start. I like your writing style. First off The sun was just starting to fall behind the hills. The birds now hushed as night ...