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Hello there :) I thought that I'd do the honours “What are you ladies after today?” Celia crossed her arms and said “We need light weight traveling food.” The man ...

Hello there :) I thought that your poem lacked a lot of punctuation and so it was very hard to make out what you were trying to say at times; ...

Hello there :) I agree with borntobeawriter, your first paragraph is just excellent. I loved the way you wrote it and great imagery so to speak. I thought you did ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) So, I found this a bit unflattering. You seemed to confuse your tenses a lot and it was distracting. For example I’m pretty ...

Hello there :) I only managed to read some of this so I thought I'd do the honours. Dumping the body of the unconscious beautiful vampire onto the couch. This ...

Thank you so much guys.

Hello there Munchkinzizzles (interesting username :) ) Anyways, I thought that I'd do the honors in reviewing this. I honestly thought that there was a lot of dialogue in this. ...

Hello there Munchkinzizzles (interesting username :) ) Anyways, I thought that I'd do the honors in reviewing this. I honestly thought that there was a lot of dialogue in this. ...

Hello there blackbird12 :) To be honest, I found this a bit confusing at first. But you know what, this is a great poem. I liked the depth and how ...

Hello there FireandIce and welcome to YWS, I hope you like it here. I thought that this was a very witty, creative poem to a honest. It showed a lighter ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS LiteraryBeauty :) What an interesting introduction, I loved the depth and logic in it. I agree with theEnigma about your paragraphs, maybe you could ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) Well this is a very passionate piece you have here. I just have some concerns as it goes towards the end; it just ...

Hello there I thought I'd do the honours, mostly because I really feel I should say something about your writing; I thought this was great. I like the way you ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) Well, I really did not understand this, I don't know if Im not looking at it right so I'll base this review on ...

Hello there :) This is not completely bad. The problem I had though was the lack of punctuation; there are places in there that could have used a comma, a ...