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Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I thought I'd do the honours;) Except for how it was puffy like a n allergic reaction to a wasp sting. Walking out ...

Hello there :) I will just outline a few problem areas I dropped the body on the ground with a thud . I have a problem with this sentence. The ...

Hello there :) Interesting story you have here. I'll first outline the problem areas. I love the first paragraph, you describe things well and you have great use o imagery. ...

Hey Mrs Lunchbox :lol: That was funny. -Thank you for clearing that up, I was about to ask you what your username meant. Cool, you really thought about this. -You ...

Hello there :) I thought that I would do the honours My uniform was stuck to my back with sweat, (maybe you could try "from") Another thing I should think ...

Hello there :) I have never said this before but this was a very colourful poem! As I read this, the general flow of your words created a form of ...

Hello there pigeon :) I really like your writing style, you really have a way with your words and this was an interesting take. I had a problem however with ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS, hope you like it here! :) Haha, this was really funny. I love the show Scrubs and I think you nailed Dr. Cox's character. ...

Hello there :) You are right about the spelling. Next time try to run a spell check, there is one available here when you edit. Spelling errors are just very ...

Hello there :) I really enjoyed this poem a lot. I liked the flow or the rhythm you incorporated in there. I still think that it could use some more ...

Hello there :) I agree with angermanagement on most parts and she gave you a great review. Your poem lacked punctuation and you used SMS language in the last stanza. ...

Hello there :) I will firstly start with the parts which I thought needed some correcting Waking up in the middle of the day to find that my whole house ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I will first off start with the places I thought needed some correction It start ed at the begin n ing of time. ...

Hello there :) I found no spelling errors or anything that needed to be correct so I'll just comment ;) ) I thought this was very interesting...it's not everyday you ...

Hello there :) I think there is more you could have done with this. There was a lot of contradiction with your points. the best thing would be to swim ...