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Hello there :) So this is a very bitter/sweet story. I was not expecting the ending at all, the whole time I was thinking that Rosalie was going to run ...

Hello there :) So this was defintely suspense packed story. The truth unravels only at the end, lovely. I have but only a few problems though: I thought that your ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I can see that you have done a few reviews despite the fact that you are really new so good job! Now, back ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) This is pretty lengthy, but I'll try my best. “How long has it been, son…that you called your father? I’m sure he would ...

Hello there... :) This is a sweet poem. I can totally relate to it first of all. The flow is great, the rhyming, where it's supposed to rhyme is not ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! Hope you I like it here. There are a lot of grammar mistakes, you never capitalised your 'I'. Anyway I think your story right ...

Hello there :) So, I thought your poem was a little confusing. Confusing in the sense that none of your stanza's really mesh well, each one stands on its own ...

Hello there :) A lot has been said by the reviewer before me, so I'll try not to repeat anything. He hestitated by the door and slowly tapped the neutral ...

Hello there forestqueen808 :) I thought that the content of this was very ordinary. Even though I felt the emotion and the heart ache expressed by the narrator, towards the ...

Hello there Subhi :) I thought I'd do the honours. I have not read the original version so bear with me. So, I'll start with the problem areas or what ...

Hello there Jane :) Short, sweet and to the point. Even though the storyline is pretty obvious, there is a great use of imagery and your descriptions and message are ...

Hello there :) Well, this is pretty good. First of all, I like how you manipulated your words. It made the whole poem intelligent. I just loved your pesonification in ...

Hello there :) I think that this is really good. The storyline is good, your storytelling is good. There is a lot of suspense and you describe your scenes so ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) So I get that this was from your diary but you did very little to make it into a story. Everything as you ...

Hello there :) Well, I think that the intension behind this post is quite creative. It could however use a little spicing up. I think that you gave too many ...