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Hello there :) Now I'm no photographer, so I don't the lingo or what people are looking at to analyse photos so I'll just give my honest opinion :D . ...

Hello there :) Since you are relatively new, welcome to YWS! My room was small and cold. It was made of nothing but cement, except for the old, weak cot, ...

Hello there Missy :) "Amiria!” I sighed, why couldn't I be alone for more than a few minutes? I mean seriously! "AMIRIA!!!!!" ugh,"Over here!" I shouted back. This is a ...

Hey Shear Thanks a lot. You have given me quite a lot to think about. Like the fact that I seem to have weighed too many problems on my main ...

Hello there :) Looks like the reviewer before me has done a pretty good job at outlining the mistakes in this piece. So I'll just go ahead and leave my ...

Hello there :) She sat there lost in her own thought which she thought (why not try another word here, like 'presumed'.) was genius and we all pressumed was idiotic. ...

Hello there. :) So, an interesting plot. However, your punctuation is lacking in some areas. An eerie whisper echos down the hallway , "If you ever tell anyone what you ...

Hey Missy I'm glad I could help. The edited version is sooo much better, especially the first paragraph. I would more than happy to read the upcoming chapters. Now that ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I will firstly start with the flaws of your piece. My fiancée and I were at the Esquire ball having a ball (ball ...

Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) So.... A blur of colour whizzing by me, the leaves crunching under my feet as I sped along the old trail in the ...

Hey, hellooo. Could you please review my short story, please :) Phew, thanks a lot.

Hello there :) See I was wrapping your present and that’s why I didn’t want you to come in, I’m fine so you can go now! Merry Christmas dear.” I ...

Her hand twitched a little. This distracted her from her thoughts for a moment. She had been sitting on a sofa in the living room for hours now, thinking. The ...

Hello there :) Welcome to YWS! Rain fell from the darkened sky as piercing drops. I think that you were trying to create an illusion here but this sentence is ...

Hello there Baboon :) So I'm seeing quite a number of flash fiction posts these days but this my friend was pretty good. It was short but I got so ...