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Re: Fire
Hello there :) I had no problem with you vocabulary, I thought it was just right. I'm going to take a wild guess and say this 'fire' is rage deep ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: Mask
Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) Your poem is pretty straight forward. I really liked the concept and the whole message, which is some pretty relatable stuff. However, I ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: Tea
Hello there :) First of all, I was drawn to this poem by the title. Although the poem is very witty and different, to me it was just too simple. ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: A Christmas Sketch
Hello there :) I generally loved the power this poem possessed. I liked how you kept a consistent rhythm. My one and only problem was the overuse or too many ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: One Reason Why People Aren’t Better Than People
Hello there :) I'm also kind of tired of these posts. They actually have made everything so much complicated because of all the different opinions and the fighting is just ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: Let's go in zig-zags, shall we? =)
Hello, hello and hello! Since I joined this site, I've never really formally introduced myself. --My real name is Tshetsana...yeah, I'm pretty sure you've went over that a couple of ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: The New Ways of Old Death
Hello there 'dude' :) Since you're an avid reviewer, I felt almost obliged to review one of your works. Anyway, on to the review. I really like the mood you ...
Dec 26, 2010 -
Re: Taking Over The World (working title)
Hello there :) I thought that this was very choppy, all of it. Firstly, for an introductory piece, I am not drawn in. I mean, if this is a novel, ...
Dec 24, 2010 -
Re: Secret Love *Edited
Hello there and welcome to YWS! :) I actually found no problem with the length. You seem to have covered every nook and cranny in the information department. Sometimes, as ...
Dec 23, 2010 -
Re: Literally Crazy
Hello there :) The previous reviewer probably covered what I wanted to say. The first two paragraphs of the story are actually quite fact based. I couldn't tell whether I ...
Dec 23, 2010 -
Re: One Day
Hey. Thank you both for taking time and reviewing my poem. So, I shall sit and observe For I will get my turn... One day. For some reason, this just ...
Dec 23, 2010 -
Re: Perfect Flaws
Hello there :) I could really relate to this poem. I actually find myself with the same feelings on occasion. What I liked about it is how it transcended from ...
Dec 23, 2010 -
Re: Untitled Photo (YWLJ possibly)
Hello there inbetweener :) First of all, I need to get myself a camera because taking pictures, looks like fun! On to the review, I agree with Justagirl on this ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: One Day
Hey. So I haven't written a poem in a long while so today, I decided to force one out no matter what. People think it’s right, When I fall into ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: We sit and drink
Hello there :) I kind of liked the poem. The idea was well thought out and you managed to make it into words without it being completely disastrous. There were ...
Dec 22, 2010
