zephion

Sounds like you may need to work on your hook. You should surprise the reader with the first few lines, interested them, and make sure that interest lingers so that ...

I'm a playwright! I started off with short stories, but I just couldn't create the level of detail needed, so I tried writing some ten minute plays and they went ...

I like Running with the Dead or Apocalypse Rising. Both of them are very original and definitely sound cool.

Here's an idea. Perhaps the main character or hero attempts to close off the leak of mana. To find the source and block it from use. I suppose that would ...

Here we are, (No team)

Here we are, (No team) Xoop To whom it may concern, Recently it has come to my attention that some words just aren’t enough, for example the word “the”. We ...

This took so long.... but here it is (No team by the way) Rain falls, saturating our previously soaked driveway. Sounds of pattering fill my kempt room as each drop ...

No teams this time?

My alarm beeps to life, startling me out of yet another boring dream. I turn off the alarm and get dressed. I looking at the calendar, I sigh. It is ...

Thanks Aspiring Author, to tell you the truth I don't have Modern Warfare, I have played with a friend. The goal was to make these two people hired assassins which ...

Here are some edits that I made: It was the year of 1389. It was the time when soldiers use to come to back home and spent most of their ...

Really cool idea and good description of the characters. I would also recommend some added description to the battle scene. Also, during the fight of Satan and Ethaniel, what is ...

Really cool story, I love it. Just a few things. The first part was a bit fast. It was some really cool description, but if you slowed it down then ...

Awesome poem, so ominous. Keep up the good work!!

Lol, but I think if you slowed it up a bit and possibly allow the character to gradually realize what had happened it would be clearer. It just seems like ...