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I love this bit. It doesn't seem pointless at all. ^_^ It really made me smile, and the interaction between Eric and Sarah seemed very realistic. This part did a ...

Hm. Not badly done. I like your narrative voice in this piece. It helps us get to know your character quickly. The John of CIPHER is rather a step up ...

Hmmm.... let me think. Well, I'm not sure how you'd get your hands on one of these, but I'm Catholic and every church I've ever been to has a missal. ...

Hey there! Nice job. I like this concept, and Kissermiortok cracks me up. The story seemed interesting and I can't wait to find out what happens next, and get an ...

Chapter Five: The Council of Chiren “State your name.” the Councilwoman says, her voice evidentially as blah and blank as she can make it, though she seems to have perked ...

Dang, he is getting to be one heck of a good liar, isn't he? You did a really good job with this part. His phone conversation with Sarah seemed quite ...

Ooh, excellent chapter. Very nice job. I still love your characterization, you're really good at helping the reader get to know your characters. *repeats self ad naseum* Let's see.... in ...

I love this contest! Your entry really made me laugh. Truly brilliant. My favorite part was the first paragraph, where it was going on about her "battle." XDD ...I can't ...

Chapter Four- The Golden City All intruders are to be killed? What the hell is that all about? The villagers just glare straight ahead at me, and I can’t help ...

Oooh, great chapter. I like the continuation of the brick metaphor, and the contrast between Eric's thoughts and what he actually says. I also love the bit about the birthday ...

Thanks! Wow, that was really good. I like how we're kind of thrust into Kate's world with little or no explanation, making the reader want to hear more of the ...

Hey, um, I'll gladly review it, but I'm having trouble finding part 1 in your portfolio... there seem to be several threads there titled "Songwood," and I can't figure out ...

Nice opening! I rather like this, Anne is an easy character to relate to, and this time you did a nice job of letting us get into her head. You ...

Well, I'm no great judge of lyrics, in fact, I'm no judge of lyrics at all. I couldn't write poetry if my life depended on it. XD But this sounds ...

Wow. That was a really good story, beautiful and sad. I can't think of anything to say for critique, really. I loved the characterization, the atmosphere, everything about it. Wow. ...