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Okay! Sorry for my lateness, my internet randomly gave up on life last night, and was only reluctantly resurrected this afternoon. There was a series of events that led to ...

Uhm... *suddenly feels extremely shy* I could sort of use a crit too. ^_^ I suppose I'll go with the first chapter of my story, since the others probably wouldn't ...

Oh, I've got one! (sorry the writing's not very clear... I had to shrink it down by a lot). It's not perfect, obviously... I didn't even think of scale while ...

Hi there! This is a pretty good start, I'm really interested to see what happens next and learn more about your characters! I really like Skye, she seems like an ...

More lateness on my part, I'm so sorry! OTL There were all of three customers – myself and Catty included. The third man wasn’t a customer at all, rather a ...

Gah! Sorry for my lateness. *shame* That was a really good bit, gives us a chance to get to know a character who, up to now, has been relatively minor, ...

~~~ {Part III- The Soldier and the Spy} ~~~ Chapter Eight- The Mountain Road “He’s dead, isn’t he.” I say after a time. Iarin turns her face away, looking out ...

Firstly, that was a great piece. I love your mention of things such as the guy at Dunkin' Doughnuts and the way he was filling the cups, or the teenagers ...

Oh, poor Carolina... once again, you do an absolutely awesome job of helping us get to know and identify with your characters. The lunch monitor on duty stormed over to ...

Hello Razor! *waves* You're actually quite good at writing synopses, I've been trying to come up with a good one for my own beloved LoSLoR for awhile, and I just... ...

ZOMG, you lost your jump drive? Yikes, that sucks. That's why I'm scared to use one to back up LoSLoR... I might just die if I lost all that typing. ...

Also a great chapter, and personally, I like how everything isn't made obvious right away. It makes the reader have to give things a moment of thought, which can only ...

*gasp* Another story from Razor! Must read! I love your first sentence, it's a great hook into the story. The narration constantly made me laugh, you did a great job ...

Wow, this is a really good first chapter. It really drew me in, and I can't wait to read the next one! I loved the imaginary newspaper headline, and the ...

Chapter Seven- A World in Which I Do Not Belong Deer Valley Unified School District Boulder Ridge Middle School Student ID #: 960044 Student: Bering, Emily R (F) Grade 8 ...