zankoku_na_tenshi

Hey there! That was a pretty good start, and I too, really liked the letters to home. They helped establish a good flow in the piece. I also found myself ...

Late to critique as ever, I don't think there's really anything I can say about this that hasn't been said before. So, to repeat the rest: I thought this was ...

Haha, that was pretty good. It made me laugh in any case. Perhaps not rolling-on-the-floor, my-sides hurt-because-I-can't-stop-laughing funny, but it made me giggle and cheered me up. I'll read just ...

Eeeh? Eeeeeeh? EEEEEEHHHH?? Wow. This was a pretty awesome chapter. It left me totally confused and disoriented, but in a good way. I've got to know what happens next! Why ...

Well, if you're asking which one I prefer to write in, I'd have to say past tense, simply because I'm more used to it and it comes more naturally to ...

Okay, this is just all kinds of awesome. I love your style of writing, for a reason I can't quite identify. It's sort of soothing, in a way. Somehow, it ...

Alright! *high fives* Congrats! That's great. Even if there's a lot of editing left, it feels awesome just to know you've made it through, huh? Great job, super congratulations, and ...

It's warm outside in Phoenix today, as usual, but I was in Illinois and Missouri most of the weekend and it was freaking freezing. ...Well, you know, relatively. Like, 30-45 ...

Late! Again! What the heck is wrong with me? “Are ye jus’ gon’ stan’ there ‘n’ worshi’ me c’ling o’ are ye gon’ say summat?” ...Okay, I know Clyde is ...

You think this is a bad start? ... *Looks at her own Chapter One* ... *goes off to cry in a corner* *Recovers from sudden, overwhelming feeling of hopelessness* In ...

Chapter Twelve: The Little House Beneath the Rain The rain isn’t so bad, really, warm and falling rather sparsely from the darkened sky. Search as I might, I can’t find ...

Sorry for the late review-- things have been kind of crazy at school lately. Frankly, I can't find much to criticize in this chapter. The whole thing was very well ...

Wow, this was a great beginning, too. I always envy people who are good at beginnings, the beginning is one of my many fatal weaknesses. XD The magic infused glass ...

Ooh, I really liked this first chapter, it pulled me into the story, got me interested right away. I want to read more! As for edits... Uhm... Because in a ...

Hmmm.... I really like one and three... perhaps I'm slightly more fond of three. They all seem like great ideas, but for the first two, I don't really see what ...