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Sorry for being so late... I think this was a pretty well-done chapter as well, and I like how you're showing us a bit more vulnerability and struggle on the ...

Yay, day five! I like this chapter much more then the previous one, your character got a lot more fleshed out and you were back t showing rather than telling. ...

Okay, day four! :) The guest speaker said that if teens didn’t create a healthy lifestyle now, they could become obese when they grow older, if they aren’t already. She ...

Sorry for the lateness, I'm having real trouble editing this chapter. it's hard to find things that are wrong with it, frankly. XD You're doing a great job with this ...

Ok, I did Day 1 and 2, I'll try to do 3-5 tomorrow. ^_^

Hello! This second chapter is quite well done as well. Once again, your narrative voice is brilliant, and your main character is likable and easy to relate to. ^_^ Gah, ...

Hi there! This was a pretty good start, and your narration is very inviting and easy to read. I really like, as others have said, how sincere and genuine it ...

Hey there! Summer's here, and one of my goals is to get more involved with the community at YWS (I'm almost painfully shy, it took me like 2 weeks to ...

We do our best to make camp on the muddy, rocky ground. The grass from before, which Iarin tells me is called Shadowgrass, and grows even without sunlight, has grown ...

The story's only been up a couple days, be patient. ^_^ Anyway, this was a really great opening, and I like the way you set the scene in the grocery ...

Sorry for being late. XD Well, I'll critique since you asked, but keep this in mind: I know nothing, and I mean nothing , about poetry. I know less about ...

Gah! I know I'm late, sorry. Now that my last-minute-pre-AP-test panic is over, I can give you a proper review. ^_^ Overall, this was an intriguing chapter-- I must admit ...

Wow, I like this a lot! The fish do look incredibly awesome, I love their O_O expressions. XD And I really like how her hand sort of draws the eye ...

Chapter Thirteen Not to be forgotten about, the other me, the voice, and the whole stupid dream sequence are back again that night. When morning comes, I’ve only slept for ...

Hey there! Haven't seen you around before, so welcome to YWS! This is a really good start, I very much enjoyed it. The bit at the beginning really pulled me ...