zalarus

haha, i said that half-jokingly. but i really do like the concept, i think it should be written in free verse, as that would add an interesting flavor to it. ...

you should probably make it a free verse epic poem. either that or blank verse. i think that'd add an interesting twist to it. but i don't think it should ...

Allen Ginsberg and Jack Kerouac for the Beat Poets. They have excellent flow, as it is meant to be read aloud, and can be both spiritual and political, but mostly ...

uhm, it's kind of impossible to critique, as it's candid and not artistic at all. i'm not sure why you posted this, as one can't really comment on it. it's ...

very nice. i like the contrast between the blueish sky and the red roofs of the houses. there's a lot of sky, but i didn't immediately realize it, so it's ...