zalarus

i see where you're coming from, adrian. it's definitely not one of my better ones. although really, all the embellishments came naturally. i wrote this about substances to be honest, ...

heh, i feel the same way about school. i am a completely out of the box person, while doing well in school requires that i be within said box. but ...

this one was really- i don't know what to say, i just can't think of a word to describe this, except that it is a good piece of poetry. keep ...

i hate to say it, but i agree with galerius, especially in that this just seems like a speech about your worries in verse. there is no artistry here. i've ...

i probably wasn't using the term correctly. i meant that you should feel free to use metaphor and literary techniques to make your poems, well, poetic. this right now just ...

i am thinking of trying my hand at prose sometime soon. i am a prodigious reader, and i think that i've read enough to know my way around prose writing. ...

a refreshingly cheerful poem. however, i agree with 'beyond the mask'... it just seemed like a lot of rhyming words. not a lot of purpose behind it. don't let me ...

well, this poem accomplishes what it sets out to do, i'll give you that. it rhymed well, it seemed to flow, and it was well-written, especially at the end. however, ...

very nice. i like the contrast between the blueish sky and the red roofs of the houses. there's a lot of sky, but i didn't immediately realize it, so it's ...

ah, i did. i read it aloud to her. i'm pleased to say that she was blown away. my heart, it soared. she's a writer herself, although she leans more ...

haha. i laughed. i clicked on it, thinking (maybe hoping?) that it was serious. but i was pleased to find out that it was a joke, and a funny one ...

my inspiration? i'd say that it was love. separation and love. this poem was born out of yearning for my beloved. it wasn't a fun time, but it certainly was ...

this is good. optimistic-hopeful. i can appreciate courage in the face of adversity. on the poem itself: it's great. very few mistakes, other than some capitalization errors. but those are ...

i agree with most of the other posters. you're not really saying much besides that you're angry. it's not very artful for a poem, but i understand where it comes ...

well it certainly got its message across, i'll give you that. i'm sure the person this is directed to would be quite taken aback by the unrestrained rage here. but ...