zalarus

as usual, you have produced a thoughtful work that is epic in its implications. when i first read this poem (that was a while ago), i was suddenly inspired to ...

to everyone out there: i'd really appreciate it if more people reviewed this, or at least gave your thoughts on it. i didn't post this just for the sake of ...

i think that it's only this one that i put in parentheses. but i did it because i read a poem by ken kesey, and i thought that it was ...

uhm, it's kind of impossible to critique, as it's candid and not artistic at all. i'm not sure why you posted this, as one can't really comment on it. it's ...

i appreciate the effort you put into this work, but i find it kind of trite and cliched. there really isn't much here other than what is seen at face ...

ehh, i'm not a fan. as usual, i agree with galerius' opinion of this piece. it was grammatically flawed, cliched and predictable. but i also concur that it could actually ...

i actually enjoyed that a lot, which is uncommon for me on these forums. it sounds like the beginning of a dark fairy tale. keep up the good work like ...

not entirely bad. it wasn't great, certainly, but it was okay. it flowed particularly well, except for in the fourth stanza, on the last line. it wasn't very artistic, or ...

you probably shouldn't dislike it as much as you do. it's better than most poetry on here. you express being trapped within a metaphorical box quite well. i haven't read ...

this is truly bitter and meaningless. i agree with your point, which is that people should be free-thinking individuals. but by attacking them like this, you're just playing their game. ...

very nice. artful and purposeful, it basically has most of the things i look for in a poem. there were times when your vocabulary could have used some tweaking, but ...

i enjoyed reading this. it reminded me of the short fiction of charles bukowski. it was bleak, dreary, and the narrator sounds like a wretch. you did a good job ...

i actually thought this one was pretty good, and i can appreciate the sentiment behind it. i agree that punctuation is needed. adrian's alternative was pretty good. keep up the ...

does that somehow change your opinion of me/the piece? i hope it doesn't. your viewpoint was valid and your criticism was pretty much accurate.

i know that i say this a lot, but there is not much artistry or purpose in this piece. i can't really say much about it. sorry.