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Part Two: I liked the ending. It was sweet and dramatic at the same time. I also liked how your characters stayed the same to the end of the story. ...

Sorry. My computer glitched and sumbited the message before I told it to. Part One: I liked the strength of Kaela and the way you made their breakup so realistic. ...

Part One:

Hey! I don't have any nit picks, because that's not really my thing, but I just wanted to let you know that I thought this was great. To make it ...

This could be good, but only if you expand it properly. Sure, you've got a good begining paragraph, and you seem to have a great voice from what you gave ...

*Cue applause* This was really good. The only thing I saw that could be improved was to maybe add a bit more description. But other than that, this was amazing. ...

This was great. I love how the words flowed with the music. It was different; good different. Very emotional. I loved the romantic engagement at the end. He obviously loves ...

Oooo! This is getting good. How mysterious! I like the fact that Gaby has started to question, causing Damien/Will to give us more background on what happened to Denise. It ...

Hey! It's me again. This was good. I like the storyline. However, there's a few things you may want to watch out for. First, I wasn't sure whether Damien was ...

Hey! It's Dinkeroo! Sorry it took me so long. I got sick, and it turned out to be the flu. Blah. It wasn't fun. Anywho... On to the critique! I ...

Great begining! I loved the way you let us relate to the main character first before dropping the "new guy" bomb! That was really effective. Also, I like how you ...

Thanks! It took me a while because I wasn't sure what to cut and what to leave. I also needed to do a lot of brainstorming and character development. Long ...

Youreit here, ready to review! This was a very interesting piece. I liked the forbidden love, and I thought you displayed that very well. Bethany is a very interesting character, ...

I liked this piece. It was easy to relate to. I think most girls have had at least one guy like her only for what she looks like, and this ...

Thanks SO much to everyone who's reviews helped me to re-write this chapter and make it work! I know there's a lot missing now between chapter 1 and 2, but ...