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I thought this was good. I liked the rhyming athough I do have to agree that it does seem a bit forced at places. But over all I thought this ...

Totally cliched and "blured" is spelled blurred.

Athen Symphonic music played throughout the off-white marble halls. The men in the dark blue coat-tails played furiously at a fast paced song. Dancers raced across the dance floors twirling ...

Yeah that was awesome! You had me fooled too. Really good writing. I'm not so nit-picky so I have no comments other than it was great! :)

I thought this was cool. Good decription and metaphors. Kind of jumpy but it's a good style. I enjoyed this. Great job!

This was really awesome. I'm not to big on gramatical and spelling errors, I'm sure you can fix any on your own. But I loved this topic. It's so awesome ...

Yeah very cool. I loved this. I just love your idea of capturing autumn in a jar. Awesome, awesome, awesome! Need I say more?

I liked it. Quite original from what I've seen. I liked how you hear only one side of the conversation and then the thoughts from them about it. Very cool. ...

I liked this. I don't know exactly why. Probably partly in the fact that it was sort of mysterious to me. I didn't understand all of it but it sounded ...

I know who this is about! Is it going in the book? I loved these lines: "and strawberry hair, once blond," I cracked up at that one. Hahaha! But isn't ...

Yeah, same thing here. It doesn't really grab your attention that much. When you're done, you just like, "Oh... ok." There's nothing much else to think about. Maybe if you ...

I found it really boring. Sorry, but you used an over used topic with hackneyed expressions. You need something with more oomph, more originality. I can't really say I like ...

Yeah it's good and all, I just didn't really understand what was happening. Clear it up and it would be great. I totally agree with glitter there.

Thank you for that! It was very helpful. Yeah, I used spell checker but any other typos are because I didn't have much time to write this down. (Evil parents, ...

A flash outside the window caught the girl's attention. She eyed the window. A few seconds later a rumble raced across the room. A mischievous grin spread across her face ...