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Hah! This was cool! I must say I like your style! I don't have much mroe to say on this, sorry. :) Keep writing! ~Yoyo 8)

Cool! Yeah, as everyone has said, it feels like it's something true, like you know what you're talking about. It's very simple and sweet, yet you get all the feleings ...

Oooh! I like this one! My only critiques are "pianoist" isn't a word, the term should be "pianist" and "anouther" should be "another" and "cheaks" is "cheeks." I don't get ...

1 - happyness = happiness (line 1 and 11) 2 - Capitalize and make sentences. Don't be afraid to use periods, right now you just have a comma at the ...

Cool! You have a neat idea going here, and if you expand on it like Lucky_Author said, you could have a great poem on your hands here! Keep writing! And ...

Piper had come running between and over tents when she heard the shout. Her sword was already drawn. She saw that the robed man had already taken his toll on ...

*trips and falls* Awah! TN you're freaking gorgeous!!!

Bob! Looks nifty. XD

Wonderful! Very original. Intersting ending, I didn't quite expect that. I loved your description of the hospital, I could really see that whole scene. Great work! ~Yoyo 8)

Wow! This is amazing! I know it's older, but it just sucked me in! Very interesting concept, and quite original as always Snoink! ;) ~Yoyo 8)

Why did it diiiieeee!!!! I was having withdrawl symptomes! :cry: Hm, man... I need to get a life. XD

Gorgeous piece! The imagery is wonderful, and the language you use is beautiful as well. No complaints! Keep writing! ~Yoyo 8)

Ooooh! This was cool! Good meter and rhyming throughout. And I really live the parts in parenthases. I looove the last two stanzas and the couplet ending. The only thing ...

I think this poem is weak. This is what I call a "woe-is-me" poem. Love is the thing that makes you crush But that is never going to happen to ...

Pshhhh, you can do it Aed. At least you're not a senior. Senior year you'll have trouble, but you'll find a way, it's not that difficult. Btw, who actually does ...