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Good luck Ari! We'll all miss you. As far as critiques go! These two are lonely. ;) Thanks! *huggle* Circus Pirates: Circus Pirates ~Yoyo 8)

*continued from Part 1 * Circus Pirates - Part 2 I awoke hours later in the bunk. I remembered where I was and groggily swung my legs over the edge ...

Haha! This is a really cute short poem! I like it! No complaints. :D ~Yoyo 8)

Oh lovely! Hooray flutes! Great use of musical terms in there, though I haven't even heard of half of them. XD The only thing I think would sound better would ...

Jars of Stars Tonight you brought down so many stars for me, I needed an umbrella. These shiny specks of light in a jar are better than one thousand fireflies ...

Best Poem Overall Best Poem in Each Category --Dramatic Poetry - When We Walked by GingerLizzy --Lyric Poetry --Narrative Poetry --Other Poetry Best Metaphor in a Poem Best Metaphor in ...

as i twirled and twirled it, feeling the slow vibration That is a really awkward line break and it does nothing for the poem. Other than that and some capitalization ...

Piper heard the elf Thomas say from next to her, "We should go look for him." "Where?" she asked, looking at him. "Hey, don't let the princess hear," he said. ...

First of all, put a space between wour paragraphs. It's easier to read then. Typo: "...sitting with their elbows on the tabletop, gazing into glasses of beer that they didn’t ...

Ouch. That's a painful poem. I mean, you feel the pain of the writer. I hope this really didn't happen to you. If it did, I am truly sorry. *hugs* ...

Edited! I hope you enjoy it! :D ~Yoyo 8) Circus Pirates - Part 1 My name is Isabella Bailey and I am running away. I have lived with my brother ...

Yeah, I could've sworn Wolf was Gwen... you guys look almost identical. O.O Makes sense that you'd be cousins though. :lol:

O.O Jabby! This is freaking brilliant! I must say, if this poem says what you feel about poetry now, you are utterly and completely wrong about yourself, because I swear, ...

Bag of Green Grapes Ploo! number. forty two two PLU #4022 It was written on a bag of green grapes and that's how I read it. I thought it sounded ...

I don't know what it was about this, but I really love it. Hm. Very affective. ~Yoyo