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Aww. I love how you wrapped it up with the fairy-tale glue thing again at the end. The rhyme scheme was flawless and just lovely. I just feel that the ...

If you read the thing Google provided on why their page was black and you want to keep thier page black now, you can use http://www.blackle.com. It's the same thing ...

Sweeney! You're supposed to wait until Part 5 to find out "who/what" Landon is. ;) But no worries, Part 5 is on its way. :D ~Yoyo 8)

Yeah, I'd crop it so all the distracting stuff on the sides are gone. But I love how everything looks so silvery and shiny! ^_^ And I love, love, LOVE ...

*continued from Part 3 * Circus Pirates - Part 4 “Well, I’ll watch the helm,” Kross said to Henry. “I was a Captain’s mate when I was a younger lad. ...

(Whoops! Mine was for ~Volant~'s post. ^_^) ^ misspelled "mispell" < will not misspell anything except for the above, which was intentional v will double check their spelling now

I think this might fit better in a blog. ;) ~Yoyo 8)

This is good! I like it. It's kind of bland in some places, but that's kind of how journals are. It's at least interesting enough to keep following the story, ...

Thank you Jabby and Heather! ^^ I made most of your fixes, but I would like to point out, Heather, that Fat Men were actually quite a popular and common ...

Hooray! Go Grif! Nice job. ^_^ *noddlenod*

Hey! Welcome to the YWS! This is a great piece and as everyone else has pointed out, wonderful imagery. You're really got a knack. I hope you stick around! :) ...

The Flow of Thunder don't play outside the flow of thunder. carrying mysteries, they had forgotten me. she held out her hand and I looked once more, me, remotely possessed ...

*continued from Part 2 * Circus Pirates - Part 3 As Angie came on deck into the full sunlight, the voice called again, angrily, “Where did those two lazy, weaseling ...

This is waaaay to short and cliche to be much at all. Sorry to be so harsh, but scrap this one or add a LOT more to it. If you ...

Clever. I liked the italization of "was" in the last line. It really drives the point home. But the rest is sort of "blah." Take the other's adivce, but keep ...