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Awah! It's so adorably cute! Nice shading. ^_^

Awww! Cute style Chiko! Make me want to do a chat comic... *ponders*

Ewwww... I love it! XDI love the first stanza, but the second one is hard to understand. Maybe it's meant to be that way? But it just doesn't make as ...

Girly and petit, dark blonde, small nose, and big blue eyes.

Yeah, seriously. Sports is about watching sweaty guys run around being all rough & tough. ^^ That's very cool though Nate. Cute girlfriend. :P

Wheee! That's so cool Areida! Did you get to go in the Duomo? Ahhh, I'd go crazy looking at all the art there. *dies* XP

First things, capitalize, and punctuate. I like firestar's version better. It's easier on the eyes and easier to read. At minimum, capitalize your "I's." That's just proper spelling. Your rhyming ...

"These ideas in my hard are wringing my conscience" Should it be 'ringing in'? I think ringing, like the sound, is better. Wringing is like wringing your hands from nervousness. ...

" --Tear it to shreads. " Okay! :D "and eyebrow tweezers and push" it sounds like you're pushing with eyebrow tweezers. It's weird. "Today, [comma] I know that I am..." ...

I don't like the use of "settling" in the first line. I didn't know a sea could "settle" in your waist. Makes it sound like a container or something. Second ...

This is really vauge and cliche. We've all heard this poem before and it's boring. Who is the "you" in this poem? The repitition makes this boring and annoying. Sometimes ...

Oh! I heard about those riots! Have you heard about the Australian emo and scene kids fighting too? Pathetic stuff if you ask me. I don't like how it's one ...

I think you need to expand on this. You've got a goo thing going here. I like how the first stanza is, but he second stanza takes you in a ...

KFC. Like I said, always default to chicken. *nods* :) ~Yoyo 8)

Saint:: I LOVE CHEETOS!!! Mantis:: It's that Timone in the background?? XD Woot! I like that first one. Neat effect. ;)